This has problems with the format- look at the start, the 'hello' greeting, and the use of her name in the text. It's a letter not a phone call.
There are tense errors- Fortunately, everything was going well and fast.
Wrong verb choices: I had decision
Wrong words- wandering
Also, check articles, punctuation, and things like 'its' instead of 'it's'
Make sure that you answer the question- where's the description of the furniture? 'Pretty new' is not much of a description.
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