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    Human Resources Department
    Phillips International, Inc.
    7811 Montrose Road
    Potomac, MD 20854

    Dear Sir:
    I am graduating from Shanghai University next year and my major is international economics and trade. In the past several years, I have had a good knowledge of basic principle in international trade. I have learned to focus on national economics and international economics through developing view.
    During my study, I am active and positive in learning so I was awarded scholarship. I am honest, keeping promise, upright, and optimistic. I have sense of collective honor. Therefore, I am a person with social responsibility.
    I would like to work in Philips as an executive assistant..
    I am enclosing a resume and looking forward to hearing from you.


    Yours sincerely,
    Moon Jiang


    MOON JIANG
    303, No.72, Yichuan No.4 New Estate, Shanghai China
    Phone: 13917209502 E-mail:EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

    OBJECTIVE
    Work as an executive assistant in Philips International, Inc

    SUMMARY OF EDUCATION
     Excellent interpersonal communication skills
     Native Chinese speaker, fluent in English: passed CET 4,CET 6
     Computer literate: Microsoft office,

    EDUCATION
    Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce (SILC), Shanghai University Shanghai, China
    Bachelor International Economics and Trade expected June 2005
    Took Intermediate Interpretation course in Shanghai Institute Study University

    EXPERIENCE
    Maodun Tutor Agency Shanghai,China
    Tutor. Teach a 12-year-old boy New Concept English. 2004-present
    Maodun Tutor Agency Shanghai, China
    Tutor. Taught a 10-year-old boy Cambridge English. 2002-2004
    Bank of Shanghai Shanghai, China
    Assistant cashier. Handled the daily revenue of a bus company. Summer, 2002
    Huaqi Agency Shanghai,China
    Sales person. Sold handwriting keyboards in a department store. Spring, 2002

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    Tdol is offline Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    Dear Sir:

    I'd use
    Dear Sir or Mdaam,

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    Re:
    • In the past several years, I have had a good knowledge of basic principle in international trade.


    Perhaps:
    • In the past several years, I have acquired a good knowledge of the basic principles of international trade.


    Re:
    • I have learned to focus on national economics and international economics through developing view.


    I am afraid I don't understand that, especially the last part. :(

    Re:
    • During my study, I am active and positive in learning so I was awarded scholarship.


    Try:
    • During my studies I was active and positive in learning, so I was awarded a scholarship.


    Re:
    • I am honest, keeping promise, upright, and optimistic.


    Try:
    • I am honest, trustworthy, and optimistic.


    :)

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    thank you very much for your correction.

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    Work as an executive assistant in Philips International, Inc

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