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    Resume

    Milky Lu

    402, No.5, Lane 988, MeiZhou Road,
    YangPu District, Shanghai, China.
    (021)55086072
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    OBJECTIVE
    Seeking a sales assistant in a company.

    SUMMARY OF QULIFICATIONS
    Interpersonal Communication
    Computer skill: Yongyou ERP-Finanical fraction, Microsoft Office, Windows XP Professional, Visual Basic 6.0, Dreamwave/Fireworks/Flash, Visual Foxpro 6.0.
    Language : Fluency in English Writing/Speaking/Listening, Native Shanghainess and Chinese Speaker, some French,
    CET 4
    Key leadership role at Shanghai University


    EDUCATION
    Shanghai University JiaDing, Shanghai
    Post-Diploma of Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce(SILC) Shanghai University, major in International Economics and Trade, September 2003 to present.

    Shanghai University JiaDing, Shanghai
    Diploma of Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce(SILC) Shanghai University, major in International Trade, September 2000 to July 2003. GAP 3.0

    Additional Course and skills
    Alliance Fransaise de Shanghai Hongkou, Shanghai
    Studying in primary French, June 2001 to July 2001.

    Shanghai University Baoshan, Shanghai
    Studying in intermediate computer skill, April 2002 to July 2002.

    EXPERIENCE
    Hutai branch bank Shanghai, China
    Credit department Assistant in Shanghai Bank, Responsible for account login and update, packing up the files and document, communication with customers. Summer 2002.

    China Shipping International Trading Co., Ltd. Shanghai, China
    Assistant in Ship Building and Trading Department, Responsible for opening the credit letter, typing some document such as claim letter and requirement of business letter. Summer 2004.


    Covering letter

    Dear Mr employer
    I am writing in response to your advertisement in the October edition of Career Post for recent graduates to take up positions as sales assistants. I enclose my CV for your consideration.

    I first became interested in sales assistant. Because I am major in international economics and trade, and your company has the better reputation in the China market. I felt that this work would be an ideal way to combine my skills, knowledge and interests in business, problem solving and working with people.

    As you will see from my CV, I am currently studying for a Post-Diploma of Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce (SILC) at Shanghai University, but I had twice experiences as an assistant. First, I had two months’ work experience as an assistant of credit department in Hutai branch Bank of Shanghai Bank. This work involved responsibility for account login and update, packing up the files and document, communication with customers. Second, during the summer holiday I worked for the Ship Building and Trading Department in China Shipping International Trading Co., Ltd. I was responsible for opening the credit letter and typing some document such as claim letter and requirement of business letter. Although I haven’t half a year’s work experience as a sale assistant, I believe the skills and knowledge about international trading will be a good grounding for a career.

    I can be available for interview at any time and look forward to hearing from you.

    Yours sincerely


    Milky Lu (Miss)

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    Default Re: Please help me to amend my resume and coverting letter

    Sorry , I use the guest to submit my resume and covering letter.

    And then I make two mistakes of spelling.

    not 'remend', is 'amend'

    not ' coverting', is 'covering'.

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    Dear Mr employer

    Dear Sir or Madam,

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    The opening is good,but this sentence needs some work:
    I first became interested in sales assistant. Because I am major in international economics and trade, and your company has the better reputation in the China market. I

    The first sentence is incomplete- do you mean to join the two?

    I first became interested in sales assistant because my major is international economics and trade


    and your company has the better reputation in the China market

    'better' is wrong; surely, it should be 'best', or 'finest'?

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    I will be correct them as soon as possible.

    Thank you.

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    Hello

    I'm a young American and I live and work in Jiading, Shanghai. I need a Chinese tutor to improve my Chinese language skills. Please send me an email if you are interested. I need to improve..........

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    Jake

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