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    Correction request~~~~~Thanks a lot!

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    Room 203 No.3 Lane162
    Yanchang Road
    Shanghai 200072
    P. R. China

    Alcatel
    54 Rue La Boetie
    Paris 75008
    France

    Dear HR Manager,
    As soon as I saw your recruiting information I began to write this letter and to apply for being one of employee in your Marketing department of Shanghai office.
    Iím a college student majoring in the economics and trade and I will graduate before next spring. I live in Shanghai and I know that your company is very successful in China. You are The No. 1 telecommunication facility supplier in the world with gaining a 16.5 billion Euro in 2002, and covering more than 130 countries. All of this attracts me to try to work for you and to realize my value with the development of Alcatel in China.
    Iím vigorous and have the fresh knowledge about marketing, fluently in English speaking and master computer operation. So Iím sure I will satisfy your requirement. Asian Market is very important for you; it takes 19% of your world market and has exceeded your North America marketís 18% to be your second biggest market in the world. Iíve finish my internship in Alcatel China Investment Co. Ltd this summer, and I Ďm sure I can be qualified for the position in Marketing department. Iíll be your right choice.
    Iím looking forward to the interview and to give you more my personal information. Please contact me through 13761156158.


    Yours sincerely


    Penny Lee




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    Penny lee

    Room 202, 162Lane, Yanchang Road
    Shanghai, China 200072
    Phone: (021) 56383318, Mobile Phone: 13761156158, Email: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

    SUMMARY OF QUALIFICICATIONS
    ● Interpersonal Communication ● Supportive and Responsible
    ● Computer literate: Microsoft Office, Windows XP Professional, Microsoft Project, Have ability to make front page, computer hardware operation.
    ● Fluent in English speaking, reading, writing.
    Relevant certificate:
    Certificate of State College English Test-Band 4 (CET-6), June 2004
    Certificate IV in English studiesóSILC Program, June 2003
    Diploma of international trade, June 2003
    RELEVANT COURSES WORKS
    ● Marketing, such as making business reports, making business strategy plan.
    ● Basic Economy Laws ● Corporation Finance ● Bank Management ● Basic Accounting,
    ● International Import and Export.

    EDUCATION
    Sydney Institution of Language and Commence (SILC), Shanghai University
    Diploma of International Trade to June 2003
    Sydney Institution of Language and Commence (SILC), Shanghai University
    Bachelor degree of International Business and Trade to June 2005

    WORK EXPERIENCE
    Alcatel China Investment Co., Ltd.
    Executive Assistant
    Being Responsible for going through the formalities of closing Alcatel China Limited Shanghai Representative Office, Translating and many other affairs.
    July ~August 2004
    Shanghai Wicresoft Co., Ltd.
    Intern as the ITG Department manager assistant
    Being Responsible for hardware allocating for the whole company
    Dealing with customersí simple questions of the software
    June ~July 2002

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    As soon as I saw your recruiting information I began to write this letter

    This sounds a bit overenthusiastic to me.

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    Re: Correction request~~~~~Thanks a lot!

    Dear HR Manager

    I wouldn't use this.

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