I've written this essay, but I don't know if it is a good one. Could you please evaluate this essay in terms of structure and ideas, is it a convincing essay or not? And the most importantly, I want, if you please, to know about its weak points
Teachers between strictness and friendliness
Of all other jobs, teaching is considered a highly respected profession. Because he deals with a wide slice of society represented by his students, teacher is supposed to be a likeable person, but could this be a general judgment of all teachers? It is my belief that even though the serious teacher may be highly respected, the friendly teacher is the more liked by students.
The first type of teachers, who is the less loved, is the serious teacher. If you had a teacher from this pattern, you would constantly feel as if a thick barrier prevents you from communicating with him, and consequently loving him. My math's teacher, for example, was very strict and a regulation lover. With his black suit and thick glasses, he used to enter the classroom steadily without even to smile. Some students described him as an officer in a military parade! In addition to the absence of communication, mysterious fear and silence prevailed during his classes despite the fact that he didn't hit nor abuse any student. To be a very strict teacher means most likely losing the sense of spontaneity.
Another type of teachers who acquires his students love and respect is the friendly one. Avoiding the excessive strictness and sternness could be a prime step towards being a popular teacher exactly like my Arabic teacher. Whenever you looked at her face, a splendid smile would touch your heart giving you the feeling of cordiality and friendliness that makes you more desirous to study. With such a teacher, students can enjoy going to school instead of hating it. In sum, if you want to be a loved teacher, avoiding austerity is your best bet
A successful teacher, however, trends to establish his relationship with students upon a fusion of strictness, wittiness and friendship in order to achieve a balanced and lovely relationship with them which really makes him a friend teacher.
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