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    #1

    Have I grasped the basics?

    Hey,

    I'm learning to write and have started with a process paragraph (one that describes how to do something). I'm concerned that the topic sentence is not phrased well and that it isn't well written. Can anyone give opinion? Thank you.


    Mastering the basics of chi kung meditation will equip the beginner with

    the knowledge of their body and mental discipline that they will need before

    moving on to more advanced techniques. Start out by finding a quiet place where you know

    you will not be disturbed. Sitting cross-legged on the floor; breathe at a normal pace

    and allow any thoughts swim into your mind to fall away. Allow yourself several

    minutes to relax and forget about everything in your day so that your mind is left blank

    and relaxed. The meditation begins with a deep five second inhalation through the nose.

    Start this breath by pushing out your lower abdomen in order to expand your

    diaphragm and let the bottom of your lungs fill with air. As you feel your stomach stretching to it's

    limit begin to expand your chest to continue filling your lungs to their limit. Once a full breath has

    been achieved allow the air to slowly leak out of the mouth over a ten second

    count. Let your chest to deflate naturally and then slowly contract your abdomen to ensure no air is left in your

    lungs. At the end of the exhalation it should feel as though you are forcing every last bit of air with

    your abdomen. Then, with a tight stomach and empty of air, deny your body oxygen by refraining to

    inhale for five seconds. Ignore the panic that floods your mind and at the end of the five seconds

    restart the breathing from the beginning. Circling through this process for twenty minutes will teach

    the student to understand their body on a deeper level, and develop the intense mental focus that

    will be essential for more advanced techniques as well as aid them in their day to day life.


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    #2

    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    Lots of people have viewed but noone has said anything. Why?

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    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    I suggest:


    Mastering the basics of chi kung meditation will equip the beginner with knowledge about the body and will help to increase mental discipline.

    (You have used the other parts of the sentence in your summary sentence)

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    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    Quote Originally Posted by Thevor View Post
    Start out by finding a quiet place where you know
    you will not be disturbed. Sitting cross-legged on the floor, breathe at a normal pace and allow any thoughts to fall away. Allow yourself several minutes to relax and forget about everything in your day so that your mind is left blank and relaxed. The meditation begins with a deep five-second inhalation through the nose.

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    #5

    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    Quote Originally Posted by Thevor View Post
    As you feel your stomach stretching to its
    limit begin to expand your chest to continue filling your lungs to their limit.
    Quote Originally Posted by Thevor View Post
    Repeating this process for twenty minutes will teach the student to understand their body on a deeper level, and develop the intense mental focus that will be essential for more advanced techniques as well as aid them in their day to day life.


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    #6

    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    Thanks so much everyone
    I'm going to keep coming to this site while I continue to learn.


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    #7

    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    seems you mastered the basics of English but haven't really mastered the basics of text formatting :)

    Don't forget, in the future, when you post long texts, write them in paragraphs, at maximum 1-2 sentences per paragraph.

    You want proof? Try to read this:

    seems you mastered the basics of English but haven't really mastered the basics of text formatting :) Don't forget, in the future, when you post long texts, write them in paragraphs, at maximum 1-2 sentences per paragraph. I am a little little cowboy ha ha ha. Who wanna bet me? hahahahaha. Blablablblablalbal

    Get the point? :)


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    #8

    Re: Have I grasped the basics?

    In order to improve your writing, you should have strong English gramatical skills, so that you may write well any kind of phrases and there is a need of more improvements in your paragraph!

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