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    As we know, Globalization code for development of society in which education, culture, economic and so on. Globalization is the result of developing of technology communication and transportation. This phenomenon spread in wild area such as xxxxxxx.Globalization in the xxxxxx are impact the economic , political and environment .

    At the beginning, before 35 years ago, xxxx did not develop yet ,until the oil was found .However founding oil in xxxxxx was the main reason for it to became a develop country. Also xxxxx start to import a lot of technology from big developing countries and this technology change people life .for example: xxxx has been building a lot of skyscrapers and many malls to encourage business men and tourists to live or to work in it.However when people from different countries live in xxxxx perhaps kinds from crime will be appear ...
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    Re: Could you, please, check my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by bosaltan1 View Post
    As we know, Globalization code for development of society in which education, culture, economic and so on.

    Two things:
    1. Make a sentence out of that.
    2. What are you trying to say?
    Quote Originally Posted by bosaltan1 View Post
    Globalization is the result of the development of modern technology communication and transportation.
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    I am not sure you really know what you want to say.


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