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    Can u all help me to check the letter format (not sure actually) ,and my grammar in this letter? and how to make my sentences more appropriate?
    thxs 1st~

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    Faculty of Computer Science and Information
    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan
    KUCHING

    21 September 2008


    Mr. Azhan Zulfadhli b. Handeri,
    The Lecturer
    Centre for Language Studies
    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan
    KUCHING

    Dear Mr. Azhan,

    Apology and Explanation for Late Assignment Submission

    I am terribly sorry for my late assignment submission, which I promised you to submit it by 4a.m. today.

    This happened because as I was printing my assignment at 3 pm just now, the ink in my printer ran out. I rushed to Desa Ilmu to look for ink immediately. By the time I had printed my assignment, it is already 5.30p.m. .You have left your office and all the staff had gone home. However, I saw Mr. Patrick Yeoh in the corridor and I asked for his help to pass my assignment to you.

    I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submit it in time. I promise that I will never this mistake.

    Please accept my sincere apologies. I really do not want to lose 3% of the marks for my late submission. Your kindness is much appreciated.

    Thank you for your time and consideration.


    Yours sincerely,
    ______________________
    Chai Chaiw Fan ( Matric number: 20752)

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    I am terribly sorry for my late assignment submission, which I promised to submit to you by 4a.m. today.


    By the time I had printed my assignment, it was already 5.30p.m. You had left your office and all the staff had gone home.

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    26 September 2008

    Chai Chaiw Fan
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    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan

    Mr. Azhan Zulfadhli b. Handeri,
    The Lecturer
    Centre for Language Studies
    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan

    Dear Mr. Azhan,

    Apology and Explanation for Late Assignment Submission

    I am terribly sorry for my late assignment submission, which I promised to submit to you by 4a.m. today.

    This happened because as I was printing my assignment at 3 pm just now, the ink in my printer ran out. I rushed to Desa Ilmu to look for ink immediately. By the time I had printed my assignment, it was already 5.30p.m. . You had left your office and all the staff had gone home. However, I saw Mr. Patrick Yeoh in the corridor and I asked for his help to pass my assignment to you.

    I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submit it in time. I promise that I will never make this mistake again.

    Please accept my sincere apologies. I really do not want to lose 3% of the marks for my late submission. Your kindness is much appreciated.

    Thank you for your time and consideration. I am sorry again for any inconvenience caused.


    Yours sincerely,
    ______________________
    CHAI CHAIW FAN

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    My lecturer says the phases that are bold,underline and Italic, are inappropriate.Any idea to make them right?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ahfan_85 View Post
    26 September 2008

    Chai Chaiw Fan
    K4/C/4/1C
    Kolej Alamanda
    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan

    Mr. Azhan Zulfadhli b. Handeri,
    The Lecturer
    Centre for Language Studies
    Universiti Malaysia Sarawak
    Jalan Datuk Mohd Musa
    94300 Kota Samarahan

    Dear Mr. Azhan,

    Apology and Explanation for Late Assignment Submission Late Submission of Assignment

    I am terribly sorry for my late assignment submission the late submission of my assigment, which I promised to submit to you by 4a.m. today.

    This happened because as I was printing my assignment at 3 pm just now, the ink in my printer ran out. I rushed to Desa Ilmu to look for ink immediately. By the time I had managed to obtain a replacement cartridge and had printed my assignment, it was already 5.30p.m. . You had left your office and all the staff had gone home. However, I saw Mr. Patrick Yeoh in the corridor and I asked for his help to pass my assignment to you.

    I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submitted it on time. I promise that I will never make this mistake again. I will make sure in future that this does not happen again.

    Please accept my sincere apologies. I really do not want to lose 3% of the marks for my late submission. Your kindness is much appreciated.

    Thank you for your time and consideration. I am sorry again for any inconvenience caused.


    Yours sincerely,
    ______________________
    CHAI CHAIW FAN

    ************************************************** *******
    My lecturer says the phases that are bold,underline and Italic, are inappropriate.Any idea to make them right?
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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
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    How about this sentence?
    "I rushed to Desa Ilmu to look for ink immediately."

    "I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submitted it on time."
    Why use 'submitted' but not 'submit'?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ahfan_85 View Post
    How about this sentence?
    "I rushed to Desa Ilmu to look for ink immediately." Too informal for this circumstance. He does not need to know that.

    "I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submitted it on time."
    Why use 'submitted' but not 'submit'? It is a past action - you failed to print it so it was not submitted. Omit "can".
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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
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    uh?i cant catch wat u mean.
    so how to write it right?
    soli for my poor understanding...

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    My turn to apologise. What do you not understand?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ahfan_85 View Post
    How about this sentence?

    "I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I can submitted it on time."
    Better:
    I regret that I did not print the assignment earlier so I could submit it on time.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    My turn to apologise. What do you not understand?

    Omit "can".
    Have a nice day...

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