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    Default Brewers contribute to communities.

    Please, proofread the sentence. Does it sound natural and correct? You can give better variants with the same meaning.
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    "Our company can offer not only beer of high quality but it also is involved in the life of city communities in the regions where the company’s production facilities are located."

    I’m trying to say that the company not only brews good beer but also helps people and social organizations of the nearby cities with anything – for example, the company gives money for different purposes of the cities or something like that.

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    Default Re: Brewers contribute to communities.

    This could be a problem: brewing beer and doing philanthropic works in the community could be seen as a conflict.

    How about stressing the quality of your product AND your willingness to contribute to the community?

    "Our company not only offers a quality product for the adult consumer, it is also a good neighbor in the regions where the company’s production facilities are located. We support efforts to better the community."


    "Our company not only offers a quality product for the adult consumer, we support efforts to better the community."


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    Default Re: Brewers contribute to communities.

    Perhaps:
    Not only do we produce a great beer, but we are also a good neighbor.

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    Default Re: Brewers contribute to communities.

    Thanks for your help.

    I would not say there is a conflict when a brewing company does something good for people of the cities where the company’s brewery is based. As far as I know all big global brewing companies develop and implement Corporate Social Responsibility programs. Of course, they promote their products via the programs but at the same time they contribute to the communities in different ways.

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    Default Re: Brewers contribute to communities.

    Quote Originally Posted by susiedqq View Post
    This could be a problem: brewing beer and doing philanthropic works in the community could be seen as a conflict.

    How about stressing the quality of your product AND your willingness to contribute to the community?
    I’m not working for a brewing company. I did some translation and just wanted to express the idea in good English and you help was very useful. Thanks again.

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