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    I love to spend my summer vacations at the beach. Most of my time at the beach is spent reading, and soaking up the sun. Walking on the board walk with the sound of the waves crashing on shore, relaxes me. The beach is the one place I can go, and not have a worry in the world. The only negitive thing I can say about my vacation at the beach is, all the food I consume. While I hate to see my summer vacation at the beach end, I know I will be back to do it all over again.

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    Default Re: please check my paragraph

    I detected only a couple of minor errors. (Note the changes.)

    Quote Originally Posted by lunchlady View Post
    I love to spend my summer vacations at the beach. Most of my time at the beach is spent reading, and soaking up the sun. Walking on the board walk with the sound of the waves crashing on shore, relaxes me. The beach is the one place I can go, and not have a worry in the world. The only negitive thing I can say about my vacation at the beach is, all the food I consume. While I hate to see my summer vacation at the beach end, I know I will be back to do it all over again.
    I love to spend my summer vacations at the beach. Most of my time at the beach is spent reading and soaking up the sun. Walking on the boardwalk with the sound of the waves crashing on shore relaxes me. The beach is the one place I can go and not have a worry in the world. The only negative thing I can say about my vacation at the beach is all the food I consumed. While I hate to see my summer vacation at the beach end, I know I will be back to do it all over again.
    The main problem was punctuation. (There were a few unnecessary commas.)


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