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    Smile Please go through & let me have your in put

    As we all know that English is an international language. So, I have taken it as a challenge to improve it and I expect your encouragement and guidance for all my endeavors. As it is beginning for me I request you to please go through and point out my mistakes.

    We should always be thankful to the God Almighty for the blessings He bestowed on us, but we take it as granted. Now what I m going to write here after reading we will be definitely thankful to the God.

    Last night in the party I met with a blind man, after some introduction; I asked to him about his blindness, that were you blind by birth or become later on, then he told me that three years ago he was manager in multinational company. Once, at weekend he went out with his family for picnic, he was having good time there, kids have started playing football and he was sitting near by & having gossips with his wife. In the meantime, miss routed ball hit on his face. It was a nasty blow caused to damage his eyes. He is been to some specialist but all vain, because the contact nerves between eyes & mind was completely damaged. So, instead of having eyes he will not be able to see rest of his life. That is so agitated, that he would crave to see his family but its all darkness whether its day or night, thatís really pity.

    Knowing his tragic story, I was so steeped in that forgot to blink for a moment and then I realized that we are so unthankful. Our eyes get opened when any of our blessings are snatched.

    In the end, I will request to everyone that always be careful and to my one of blossom friend as she used to have problems with her eyes, so please go to doctor if it is needed.


    God bless all of us

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    Default Re: Please go through & let me have your in put

    Quote Originally Posted by shanz View Post
    As we all know that English is an international language. So, I have taken it as a challenge to improve it and I expect your encouragement and guidance for all my endeavors. As it is beginning for me I request you to please go through and point out my mistakes.

    We should always be thankful to the God Almighty for the blessings He bestowed on us, but we take it as granted. Now what I m going to write here after reading we will be definitely thankful to the God.

    Last night in the party I met with a blind man, after some introduction; I asked to him about his blindness, that were you blind by birth or become later on, then he told me that three years ago he was manager in multinational company. Once, at weekend he went out with his family for picnic, he was having good time there, kids have started playing football and he was sitting near by & having gossips with his wife. In the meantime, miss routed ball hit on his face. It was a nasty blow caused to damage his eyes. He is been to some specialist but all vain, because the contact nerves between eyes & mind was completely damaged. So, instead of having eyes he will not be able to see rest of his life. That is so agitated, that he would crave to see his family but its all darkness whether its day or night, thatís really pity.

    Knowing his tragic story, I was so steeped in that forgot to blink for a moment and then I realized that we are so unthankful. Our eyes get opened when any of our blessings are snatched.

    In the end, I will request to everyone that always be careful and to my one of blossom friend as she used to have problems with her eyes, so please go to doctor if it is needed.


    God bless all of us
    We should always be thankful to the God Almighty for the blessings He bestowed on us, that we take for granted. Now after reading what I'm going to write here, we will definitely be thankful to God.

    Last night at a party I met a blind man. After some introduction, I asked him about his blindness; whether he was blind by birth or became blind later on. He told me that three years ago, he was a manager in multinational company. Once, at the weekend he went out with his family for a picnic. He was having good time there; the kids had started playing football and he was sitting nearby & gossiping with his wife. In the meantime, a mishit ball struck [because putting two "hits" together didn't sound very good] him on the face. It was a nasty blow causing damage to his eyes. He went to some specialists but it was all in vain, because the contact nerves between the eyes & brain [best to stick to the medical term when referring to medical issues] were completely damaged. So instead of having eyes, he will not be able to see for the rest of his life. It is so agitating that he would crave to see his family, but it's always darkness, whether its day or night. Thatís really a pity.

    Knowing his tragic story, I was so steeped in emotion [you cannot just be steeped, you have to be steeped in something] that forgot to blink for a moment. And then I realized that we are so unthankful. Our eyes get opened when any of our blessings are snatched.

    In the end, I will request that everyone always be careful. And to my one of blossom friend, [I don't understand what "blossom friend" means here - it's a song by Nick Drake] as she used to have problems with her eyes: please go to doctor if it is needed.


    God bless all of us.

    Just some quick points on the use of the word "God."

    If it is preceded by the word "a" then you will generally type "god" with a small g. This is a non-specific god, and could be used in the sentence "people have believed in various gods throughout history," "I am praying to my god," "the gods are on my side" or, "Zeus was a Greek god."

    God with a capital "G" refers to God by name. In the west, this would generally be interpreted as the Judeo-Christian god. This is for no other reason than Christianity being the majority religion, and so the god most people will hear being referred to as "God." But other religions such as Sikhs and Hindus will often call their god "God" too. Muslims will typically favour the name Allah instead, but it's not unknown for some Muslims to use God and Allah interchangably.

    When you refer to "the God Almighty," that is correct. But it's also acceptable to use "God Almighty" without a "the" in front of it. But "the God" on its own isn't ever used, because it is easily confused with "the god" with a small g.

    I don't know where the English teachers stand on the whole "He" thing in the middle of sentences. As long as you remember that it is a specifically religious way of writing, and you will never find it outside of religious writing, because it is grammatically incorrect, strictly speaking. It's a stylistic device used in various holy books to highlight important things, but a lot of religious people have allowed it to enter their general writing on religious topics. Personally, I would avoid doing it in academic essays, or anything like that, (unless you're quoting something) even if you're studying something like theology. But in general writing on the subject, it's fairly common.

    Not a teacher.

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    Smile Re: Please go through & let me have your in put

    So, I made so many mistakes, but I am really happy at least someone corrected them. For sometime I was nearly disappointed for no one had looked on my post. I would also like to appreciate you for rendering wonderful knowledge about using ďGodĒ that will surely be helpful for my future use in English.

    Thanks a lot for taking out your precious time with a request that you may be kind enough to keep correcting my posts in order to sharpen my English.

    Have a good day!

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