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    gx90t is offline Junior Member
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    Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    Are women in our society equalized to men? Can they do the same job with the same salary? Are differences exceeded between the two sexes?Why occurs this "discrimination"?
    Surely we can say that women's condition is better than in the past, when women are only an unimportant object of society. They couldn't go to school, have an education, have a job, do what they would like to do.
    At the same time we can't say that nowadays the two sexes are equilized, because more and more than ones we have the possibility to find disequalities.
    Anyway the discussion is still open.

    On one hand we have to notice the important role that women reached in our society in years. Now they can do more and more in regard to the past.

    On the other side of the argument,it's easy to find disequalities,you have only to think about the limitations that women have to respect. At work, for example, are innumerable the times when women don't receive the same salary or when they aren't respected as men,only because of the sex.
    In addition to that,women are determined to improve their position, every year we can see their improvements: in sports competition,holding a politic position and in every fields of the economy too.

    Finally,we can observe a process that can achive a great result and hoping for the best,we expect one day an equalized athmosphere between women and men.




    can you correct it as soon as possible??you can add and replace words and frases if it's necessary for understanding better the meaning....i'm waiting your reply...thanks a lot in advance...ciaoo!!

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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    Quote Originally Posted by gx90t View Post
    Are women in our society equalized to men? Can they do the same job with the same salary? Are differences exceeded between the two sexes?Why occurs this "discrimination"?

    Equalized is incorrect, equal is the word to use. "differences exceeded"? what do you mean? And: Why does discrimination occur? is the correct phrasing

    Surely we can say that women's condition is better than in the past, when women are [change to were] only an unimportant object of society. They couldn't go to school, have an education, have a job, do what they would like to do. [rephrase]
    At the same time we can't say that nowadays the two sexes are equilized, because more and more than ones we have the possibility to find disequalities. [inequalities]
    Anyway the discussion is still open.

    On one hand we have to notice the important role that women reached in our society in years. Now they can do more and more in regard to the past.

    On the other side of the argument,it's easy to find disequalities,you have only to think about the limitations that women have to respect. At work, for example, are innumerable the times when women don't receive the same salary or when they aren't respected as men,only because of the sex.[their sex or gender]
    In addition to that,women are determined to improve their position, every year we can see their improvements: in sports competition,holding a politic position and in every fields of the economy too.

    Finally,we can observe a process that can achive a great result and hoping for the best,we expect one day an equalized athmosphere between women and men.




    can you correct it as soon as possible??you can add and replace words and frases if it's necessary for understanding better the meaning....i'm waiting your reply...thanks a lot in advance...ciaoo!!
    You will need to review your structure and your wording. Good luck :)

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    gx90t is offline Junior Member
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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    mmm...and how???i'm not able to do better than this,i suppose!!can you help me??

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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    Quote Originally Posted by gx90t View Post
    Are women in our society equalized equal to men? Can they do the same job with the same salary? Are differences exceeded Not clear what is meant. Do you mean excessive? between the two sexes?Why occurs this "discrimination"?Why does this discrimination occur?
    Surely we can say that women's condition is better than in the past, when women are tense! only an unimportant object of unimportant members of society. They couldn't go to school, have an education, have a job, do what they would like to do. At the same time we can't say that nowadays the two sexes are equalized, because more and more than ones we have the possibility to find disequalities. there are still inequalities.
    Anyway the discussion is still open.

    On one hand we have to notice the important role that women have reached in our society in years omit . Now they can do more and more much more that in the past.

    On the other side of the argument,it's easy to find disequalities, inequalities. You have only to think about the limitations that women have to respect face. At work, for example, there are innumerable times when women don't receive the same salary as men doing the same job or when they aren't respected as men do not receive the same respect as men,only because of the sex.omit In addition to that,However, women are determined to improve their position. Every year we can see improvements: in sports competitions, holding a political position and in every fields field of the economy too.

    Finally,we can observe a process that can achieve a great result and, hoping for the best, we expect one day an equalized athmosphere to achieve equality between women and men.men and women.




    can you correct it as soon as possible??you can add and replace words and frases if it's necessary for understanding better the meaning....i'm waiting your reply...thanks a lot in advance...ciaoo!!
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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    with exceed i would like to say overtake!!!!

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    Anglika is offline No Longer With Us
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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    Still not quite right in your sentence as it is. Maybe "When will the differences between the sexes be overcome?".

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    Re: Women:equal or different?......can you correct plsss???

    many thanks for your pieces of advice....

    have a nice day!!kisses....

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