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    I do not believe to fall in love, I had always grown up in love.
    Never say that I fell / fall in love. Learn to climb up in life and grow up in love.
    A survey says that 80% of the love marriages fail. These 80% people are victims of love at first sight. No I am not saying anything against love at first sight here because that is altogether different theory, let us not get into that. People get fall in love at first sight but then there sight stays there only, they do not see beyond that. They marry their partner and then release they do not connect each other well. Do not get flatter with the outer looks because real beauty is within, learn to see beyond. The other 20% has this quality. Trust and understanding is the main ingredients of true love which comes from within

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    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    I do not believe to in falling in love; I had always grown up in love.
    Never say that I fell / fall in love. Learn to climb up in life and grow up in love.

    A survey says that 80% of the love marriages fail. These 80% of people are victims of love at first sight. No I am not saying anything against love at first sight here because that is an altogether different theory; let us not get into that. People get fall in love at first sight but then their sight stays there only, they do not see beyond that. They marry their partner and then release realise they do not connect with each other well. Do not get flatter infatuated with the outer looks because real beauty is within; learn to see beyond. The other 20% have this quality. Trust and understanding is are the main ingredients of true love which comes from within
    Delete underlined. Add blue.
    There are three comma splices, which I changed to semicolons.
    You can't join two sentences with a comma.

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