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    Please comment my piece of writing, thanks!

    Dear xxx

    I, Master KY, would like to say thank you for spending time on promoting I-1 in Europe. Your contribution have been resulted a great effort on the game.

    Your sincerely,

    Master KY


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    Re: Please comment my piece of writing, thanks!

    Hi Skymoon, I'd like to give my opinions on your post.
    First offIt's not neccessary to write "would like to say thank you for", just "would like to thank you for..." so u can save time, space, energy... hehehe, and second, RESULT is an intransitive verb and phrasal verb "RESULT IN" is a transitive one. so the verb RESULT cannot be used in passive voice. moreover, Your contribution HAS not HAVE. :d:d

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    Re: Please comment my piece of writing, thanks!

    Quote Originally Posted by skymoon View Post
    Dear xxx

    I, Master KY, would like to say thank you for spending time on promoting I-1 in Europe. Your contribution have been resulted a great effort on the game.

    Your sincerely,

    Master KY
    I would like to thank you for spending time on promoting I-1 in Europe.
    Your contribution has resulted in a great effect for the game.

    Don't write "I, Master KY, ..." This is only used in legal documents.
    He knows who you are by your signature, and name.

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