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    clogged with traffic

    Please correct this paragraph

    In the morning, the place where I reside is clogged with traffic. Most of the days the rush starts around 6 a.m and it continues till after noon. In this heavy traffic, vehicles move like snails.When the siignal turns green, the vehicles enter the juction even if the exit is not clear, resulting in a big block. The situation gets worsened because of the cross roads. When the signal on the other sides turns green, these vehicles merge into this big block, making the movement of the vehicles even more difficult. This often leads to accidents.Now a days police are seen to control the situation. This has helped a lot in controlling the traffic, which inturn has resulted in the reduction of accidents.Vehicles move smoothly in the afternoon,as there is no rush . But in the evening, the situation would be similar to that in the morning. This is mainly because most peolple will be getting back after their office hours.

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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
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    In the morning, the place where I reside [live] is clogged with traffic. Most of the days the rush 'hour' [OR peak traffic period ] starts around 6 a.m. and it continues till after noon. In this heavy traffic, vehicles move like snails. When the signal turns green, the vehicles enter the juction intersection even if the exit is not clear, resulting in a big blockage. The situation gets worse [gets/becomes worse OR worsens] because of the cross roads. When the signal on the other sides turns green, these vehicles merge into this big block, making the movement of the [any] vehicles even more difficult. This often leads to accidents. Nowadays, police are seen to controlling the situation. This has helped a lot in controlling the traffic, which in turn has resulted in the reduction of accidents. Vehicles move smoothly in the afternoon, as there is no rush. But in the evening, the situation would be similar to that in the morning.
    [What do mean by "would be"? Is it or isn't it?]
    This is mainly because most people will be getting going back home [returning home] after their office hours.


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    Good. Not many real mistakes. Most corrections are just suggestions to make it sound more natural. You're careless with punctuation spacing, which I've largely fixed.
    Ask questions about anything, if you like.
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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Thank you very much Raymott

    But in the evening, the situation would be similar to that in the morning.

    By this sentence I meant traffic in the evening is similar to that in the morning.(ie heavy traffic). Could you please tell me what the sentence meant when I used would be?

    Why is 'reside' replaced with 'live'?Is it just to make it sound natural?

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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    Thank you very much Raymott

    But in the evening, the situation would be similar to that in the morning.

    By this sentence I meant traffic in the evening is similar to that in the morning.(ie heavy traffic). Could you please tell me what the sentence meant when I used would be?

    Why is 'reside' replaced with 'live'?Is it just to make it sound natural?

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    It would sound more natural with "live". Probably even "the neighbourhood where I live, OR 'in which I live' ". The problem with "the place where I reside" made me think of your house, and I was wondering why your house was clogged with traffic. .

    "But in the evening, the situation would be similar to that in the morning."
    As you say "
    By this sentence I meant traffic in the evening is similar to that in the morning." Then use "is", not "would be". Your story is in the present tense, (the habitual present tense) with some present perfect about the policemen, so it still all relates to the present.
    But you've changed the point of view with "nowadays", as if you had been talking about the past. You've changed again at the end to use the future tense (would be) and (will be). The problem is that you have been changing temporal (time-related) points of view without a motivation in the story to do it.

    It's complicated. If you don't understand it, don't worry about it for now.
    It's a literary point, not a grammatical one.

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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Thank you Raymott

    'I was wondering why your house was clogged with traffic'.I like this sentence.

    I have one more doubt

    Nowadays, police are seen to controlling the situation.

    Could you please tell me why is it wrong to say 'Nowadays, police are seen to control the situation. '

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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    Thank you Raymott

    'I was wondering why your house was clogged with traffic'.I like this sentence.

    I have one more doubt

    Nowadays, police are seen to controlling the situation.

    Could you please tell me why is it wrong to say 'Nowadays, police are seen to control the situation. '

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    That should read "are seen to be controlling the situation". I made a typo.
    It's not wrong to say what you did. As I said, some were just suggestions to make it sound more natural. Of course, with the typo, I did the opposite of that!

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    Re: clogged with traffic

    Thank you very much.

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