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    We had organized a successful tv reality show in the past & few of another show, movies are in pipeline, which would be out soon. For an event/show/film to be a big success you need a dedicated, experienced and professional team, which De Novo Pace can provide you.

    Our teamís credential is that it believes to produce only a high quality commercial/film, we never compromise on it.

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    We had organized a successful tv reality show in the past & few (of an) other shows, movies are in the pipeline, which would be displayed/out soon. For making an event/show/film (to be) a big success, you need a dedicated, experienced and professional team, which De Novo Pace can provide you.

    Our teamís credential is that it believes in producing (to produce) only (a) high quality commercial/film, without any (we never) compromise on it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    We have organized a successful TV reality program in the past, and several episodes of another show; we have movies in the pipeline, which will be out soon. For an event, a show, or a film to be a big success you need a dedicated, experienced and professional team, which De Novo Pace can provide you.

    Our teamís credential is that we believes we produce only high quality commercials, films and related products; we never compromise on it.


    This is not a very strong sales pitch. What was the name of the reality program? Why did the second show only run for several episodes? What are these movies in the pipeline. At what stage are they exactly (mention a few names; don't be shy). De Novo Pace can provide you with a professional team..
    The obvious question here would be "Who would you suggest?"
    Normally we talk about credentials. You don't want to give the idea that you only have one, and that that is merely your subject belief in your abilities.

    I mightn't pass you by completely, but I'd expect something impressive to back up these claims.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    [/size] This is not a very strong sales pitch. What was the name of the reality program? Why did the second show only run for several episodes? What are these movies in the pipeline. At what stage are they exactly (mention a few names; don't be shy). De Novo Pace can provide you with a professional team..
    The obvious question here would be "Who would you suggest?"
    Normally we talk about credentials. You don't want to give the idea that you only have one, and that that is merely your subject belief in your abilities.

    I mightn't pass you by completely, but I'd expect something impressive to back up these claims.
    Thanks a lot i totally agree with ur views I will try to incorporate your suggestions and re-post it.

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