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    Default Kidnly check my paragraph on Politics

    What would be the future of the country, which inspires to be a global super-power? Politicians are experts in playing divisive politics for their personal gains. How can you justify the ethnic clashes, which are happening in the metropolis city Mumbai. A city to be a world class needs to attract world class talent and best brains from around the world. But here citizen of the country who come to Mumbai in the search of better prospectus are being beaten up as migrants. The government of the day in the state is being a mute spectator, they know such ethnic clashes will help to divide votes, which would ultimately help them at the time of elections. When politicians will have a humane character?

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    Default Re: Kidnly check my paragraph on Politics

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    What would be the future of the country, which inspires that aspires to be a global super-power? Politicians are experts in playing divisive politics for their personal gains. How can you justify the ethnic clashes, which are happening that are occurringin the metropolis city Mumbai. A city to be a world class To be world class, a city needs to attract world class talent and the best brains from around the world. But here citizens of the country who come to Mumbai in the search of better prospects are being beaten up as migrants. The State government of the day in the state is being a mute spectator is standing by, mute., they know It knows such ethnic clashes will help to divide votes, which would ultimately help them at the time of elections. When will politicians have a humane character?
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    Default Re: Kidnly check my paragraph on Politics

    (Not a teacher)

    This is generally a good paragraph; I would include a few changes as incorporated in the text below:

    What will be the future of a country which aspires to be a global superpower? Politicians are experts in playing divisive politics for their personal gain. How can you justify the ethnic clashes which are happening in the metropolis of Mumbai? To be world class, a city needs to attract world class talent and the best brains from around the world. But here, citizens of the country who come to Mumbai in search of better prospects are being beaten up as migrants. The present government of the state is a mute spectator, knowing such ethnic clashes will help to divide votes, which will ultimately help at election time. When will politicians have a humane character?



    I hope this is of use

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    Default Re: Kidnly check my paragraph on Politics

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
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    I commit very basic mistakes can you kindly put some light

    1. why 'that aspires' instead of 'which aspires'.
    2. why 'that are occuring' instead of 'which are occuring'

    Is using latter is wrong?

    Thanks in advance!

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    Default Re: Kidnly check my paragraph on Politics

    See these for the use of which and of that.

    "Which" vs. "That"

    http://www.worldwidewords.org/articles/which.htm

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