To whom it may concern,
I would like (am writing) to apply for a Li & Fung Scholarship for the exchange programme in spring semester at the University of Nottingham, United Kingdom.
As regards (Beginning with) my academic achievements, I scored 3 Cís in my GCE A Levels and 2 Aís, 1 B, 2 Cís and 2 Dís in my GCE O Levels. I have also received academic awards for excellent performance in Chinese language, history and art while studying (during my time) in secondary school.
Although I managed a 7.5 for my IELTS score, I think this is (can) only an indication of my English performance at (during) the time of examination, though (and) I seek to achieve perfection. I personally believe that as an effort to achieve perfection in the language, an environment for application development is essential, and certainly UK is the best place for this.
My personal experience can illustrate my independency. I have been studying in different countries where I had managed to get adapted to the local communities quickly, by learning (about) the local culture and practicing it. This allowed me to mingle with the local communities without much assistance from others. I am autonomic, in terms of behavior, decision making and thinking, which (this) is attributed to my parentsí mentality of independency for survival, and from this I have learned to strive for myself.
To be honest, I have not had much significant leadership experience before, but I always look (seek) for opportunities to equip myself with leadership qualities and characters. I am good at observation of (at) othersí difficulties and needs, and initiate steps (I always take the initiative) to help. I always take the initiative to lead discussions for school tasks, very often it so happens that everyone become silent, and it is I who always break the ice by trying to facilitate sustainable communication.
I have been participating in various kinds of extra-curricular activities, from cultural ones such as drama, piano playing performance, international cultural exchange in Russia, to challenging the extreme of my physical and mental capabilities- motor sports, where I have learned the importance of team spirit and concentration. I take/find every activity as a gain in my life.
A curriculum vitae of mine has been attached as a reference for (to) further assessment (me).
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