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    What's wrong with this sentence?

    My teacher asked us to correct the sentence:

    Everyday the boy,together with his classmates,

    is noticed to go to the sports ground and play football,

    enjoying themselves.

    I just cannot figure out what is wrong with it. Please

    help me to correct it and tell me why.Thanks in advance.

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    Re: What's wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by alec_cheung View Post
    My teacher asked us to correct the sentence:

    Everyday the boy,together with his classmates, is noticed to go to the sports ground and play football, enjoying themselves.

    I just cannot figure out what is wrong with it. Please

    help me to correct it and tell me why.Thanks in advance.
    What is meant by "are noticed to go" = perhaps it should be "are told to go".

    Every day the boy with his classmates enjoy going to the sports ground to play football.

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    Re: What's wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    What is meant by "are noticed to go" = perhaps it should be "are told to go".

    Every day the boy with his classmates enjoy going to the sports ground to play football.
    Well,your sentence makes sense though,but is there any grammar

    mistake in my sentence? Thanks !

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    Re: What's wrong with this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by alec_cheung View Post
    My teacher asked us to correct the sentence:

    Everyday the boy,together with his classmates,

    is noticed to go to the sports ground and play football,

    enjoying themselves.

    I just cannot figure out what is wrong with it. Please

    help me to correct it and tell me why.Thanks in advance.
    "enjoying themselves" is dangling. The subject of the sentence is "The boy".
    It is similar in grammar to: "Every day I notice the boy playing football, enjoying themselves."

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    Re: What's wrong with this sentence?

    My teacher gave us the answer,the right sentence should be:

    Everyday the boy,together with his classmates,

    is noticed to go to the sports ground and plays football,

    enjoying themselves.

    I'm even more confused.

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    Re: What's wrong with this sentence?

    Everyday the boy,together with his classmates,

    is noticed to go to the sports ground and plays football,

    enjoying themselves.

    My comments:

    The words in bold should be in the plural form. The use of passive form, 'is noticed/seen to' sounds odd. The last part in continuous tense, 'enjoying themselves', is incorrect and does not fit into the sentence.

    The sentence construction is awkward with too many pauses (staccato effect).

    It sounds a bit like a direct translation from Chinese, which is a common tendency among Chinese learners of English.

    not a teacher

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