There are many errors I found while reading this text. First, he says "allows him raise" instead of "allows him to raise". Secondly, he capitalized "Good Idea". Thirdly, he says "self-perpetuating bottleneck which purports to widen bottlenecks will suffer from the same contradiction" although he said a self-perpetuating bottleneck doesn't widen bottlenecks. What do you think?
Right on some counts. Allows him raise is a typo. Should be allows him to raise, as you've mentioned.
Capitalizing Good Idea is not necessarily wrong - he is making a special point or title of it, possibly in a side reference to Martha Stewart's popular column in her magazine entitled Good Ideas. Also, when you personify something, you capitalize it. We don't capitalize mother or nature, but we do when we speak of Mother Nature, for example. Strict rules of English don't allow us enough capitals; the Germans, on the other hand, capitalize very noun. So at least in English when we do capitalize something like Good Idea, it stands out.
His bottleneck references are rhetorical devices. I'm too confused to comment on them.
Her really butchered the punctuation on There's an inherent bottleneck in almost all human activity, the start-up costs: equipment, training and the like. Otherwise known as capital.
It should read: There's an inherent bottleneck in almost all human activity: the start-up costs of equipment, training and the like, otherwise known as capital.
He is no longer forced to decrease the price to the true (or opportunity-adjusted) cost (thus distributing the excess value to the consumer). Which gives that individual more capital, thus concentrating the ownership of capital and narrowing the bottleneck, establishing a (bad) positive feedback loop. is a long-winded sentence that he decided, wrongly, to break with a full stop/period before the Which. If he thinks the sentence is too long, he should use That. Otherwise, change . Which to , which.
He screwed up the possessive in "... just a restatement of Marx' brilliant critique ...." If you pronounce the "s" sound in the possessive, you should write it. So although can can read the Jones' car - and not say "jones-es" you can't say Marx-es without the "es" - therefore, it should be "Marx's brilliant..."
His use of ellipses (...) shows either laziness or ignorance of proper punctuation in "there's still a big problem with Capitalism2… at least from the Capitalist's perspective." God invented commas for this. Use them.