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    Dear Mr. ……,


    Thanks we receipt your email offer dated 16.12.2008.

    The price quoted by you of XYZ(Item name) US$ 30.00/Kg is on higher side whereas we received lowest prices from our other sources. We have long business association with you. So, it is our desire to continue business with you.

    Please reconsider & quote your best lowest price for our consideration.

    You prompt reply will be highly appreciated.

    Best regards,
    Shanz

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    Quote Originally Posted by shanz View Post
    Dear Mr. ……,


    Thanks we receipt your email offer dated 16.12.2008.

    The price quoted by you of XYZ(Item name) US$ 30.00/Kg is on higher side whereas we received lowest prices from our other sources. We have long business association with you. So, it is our desire to continue business with you.

    Please reconsider & quote your best lowest price for our consideration.

    You prompt reply will be highly appreciated.

    Best regards,
    Shanz
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    Dear Mr. ……,

    Thank you for your email dated 16.12.2008.

    The price of US$30.00/Kg on the XYZ(Item name) quoted by you is on the higher side, while we have received lower prices from our other sources.

    Taking our long business association into account, coupled with our desire to continue doing business with you, please reconsider and quote your lowest price for our consideration.

    Your prompt reply will be highly appreciated.

    Best regards,
    Shanz

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    Thank you so much Callichthyidae

    You have modified quite impressively

    All the best.

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    Glad I managed to help somewhat, being a newbie here.

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    Hi, you are doing well being a newbie here

    I hope you will carry on like that…. Could you please have look on my post regarding inter-dept email.

    Thanking you,
    Shanz

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