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    Hi fellow members

    Please go through this short passage and correct it for me. Many thanks in advance.

    A desert is a very dry place. Animals that live there cannot always find water. However, many small desert animals do not have to drink any water.. They get water they need by eating desert plants which have water stored in them.
    During the day, most desert animals stay underground or in the shade. The hot sun would make them sweat and they would lose much of the water in their bodies. To overcomes this problem, these animals come out at night when the desert is cool and so they do not sweat.
    The camel must drink water. But once it has drunk, it can go on for days without drinking any more. Its body can store a lot of water. It can stay out in the hot sun because it sweats very little and therefore it hardly loses any of the water in its body.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    Hi fellow members

    Please go through this short passage and correct it for me. Many thanks in advance.

    A desert is a very dry place. Animals that live there cannot always find water. However, many small desert animals do not have to drink any water.. They get the water they need by eating desert plants which have water stored in them.
    During the day, most desert animals stay underground or in the shade. The hot sun would make them sweat and they would lose much of the water in their bodies. To overcomes this problem, these animals come out at night when the desert is cool and so they do not sweat.
    The camel must drink water. But once it has drunk, it can go on for days without drinking any more. Its body can store a lot of water. It can stay out in the hot sun because it sweats very little and therefore it hardly loses any of the water in its body.
    That's all I can see.

    buggles(not a teacher)

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    Hi Buggles

    To overcomes is definitely wrong.

    Thanks, anyway.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Tan Elaine View Post
    Hi Buggles

    To overcomes is definitely wrong.

    Thanks, anyway.
    That's why I highlighted the "s" in red and underlined it!

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    Hi Buggles

    It was a careless mistake on my part. Sorry for the misunderstanding.

    Many thanks for your help.
    Last edited by Tan Elaine; 06-Jan-2009 at 16:33.

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    A desert is a very dry terrain.For the animals that inhabit the desert cannot always find water. However, many small desert animals do not need that much water. They get water they need by eating desert plants which has water in them.
    During the day, most desert animals stay underground or in the shade. The scorching hot sun would make them sweat thus causing them losing much of the water in their bodies. To overcome this problem, these animals come out only during the night when it is cooler
    The camel is one of the few desert creatures which need water. However once it has taken a drink, it can go on for days without drinking . Its body can store a lot of water. It can stay out in the hot sun because it does'nt sweat alot and therefore it hardly loses any of the water in its body.
    i tried to improve it by abit .
    Last edited by Bust3rboi; 11-Jan-2009 at 16:07.

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    Thanks, Bust3rboi.

    I hope a native speaker or a teacher of English would comment on the corrections made by both non-native members.

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