I have made some suggestions and changes before. Great job!
To the Head of the Department of Cardiothoracic Surgery
My name is A and I am a 22 year
sold medical student from X, currently attending my 5th year at the University of X.
I am writing to express my
greatinterest in applying for an elective period (one month - August 2009) at the cardiothoracic surgery department of your hospital. It has always been a great desire of mine to obtain medical experience in this fascinating area.
Since 2004/2005, I have been a medical student at the University of X. In my first two years I ?engrossed ?? [polished] my theoretical skills in anatomy, physiology and biochemistry. In the beginning of my third year, I realized how practical
themedical education has become much more practical. I learned how to perform a full clinical history and a complete physical examination. I was also able to study microbiology, pathology, pharmacology and imagiology.
In my fourth year I became a clinical student, and since then I have been learning theoretical matters and also honing practical skills in many different clinical areas; such as
I have beenbeing assigned to many different hospital deparments including General Surgery, Plastic Surgery, Internal Medicine, Cardiology, Pneumology, Gastroenterology, Rheumatology, Neurology, Ophthalmology Pediatrics, Psychiatry, Hematology, Infectious Diseases and Genetic Diseases.
As you can see, by being a 5th year medical student I have already gained basic knowledge in cardiothoracic surgery, and the opportunity to be assigned in your department would be a great opportunity to improve my practical skills. It would also allow me to get in touch with a foreign hospital and thus be able to compare different realities and medical practices, an experience that I haven't been able to have thus far.
I look forward to hearing from you and possibly working with you in the future. Thank you for your time and consideration.
There you go...I changed a bit of sentence structure just to get the flow a little easier...but other than that it is very good. :) Good luck with your posting. I hope you get the opportunity to go there. :)