Yes, its in the wrong place. It should be over in the 'Editing and Writing' section where people expect to find long essays. Even there it would be better to post a smaller sample so that people dont have to spend too long on one piece.
The people here are giving up their time for free and it is not polite to ask too much from them all at once. I could spend 30 mins or an hour rewriting you essay, but then I am doing your homework and not you. You stand a much better chance of getting a reply if you keep it short.
everyday = ordinary
every day = at least once in every 24-hour period