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    lyrics check... please

    Hello! Please, check my goofy song lyrics for grammar accuracy :

    [Verse 1]
    Watching horror films until the midnight all alone
    Looking as the flesh and skin are separating out from bones

    I love the scenes of violence, I'm mad about the blood
    I want it squirting out of bodies torn apart
    I've watched the martyrs slaughtered by the killer's blade
    They looked like stuffing on a plate

    [Chorus x2]
    I'm the bloodhound forever
    I'm the bloodhound to the bone

    [Verse 2]
    Glimmer of a blade and blood is splashing on the screen
    Cut off heads, the bleeding dead - nothing from what I've never seen

    I've watched a thousand times "A Nigtmare On Elm Street"
    I've watched my coevals scream of torture, cry and bleed
    I’ve seen the hungry corpses rising from the dead
    And once again the screen paints red

    [Chorus x2]
    [Solo]
    [Pre-Chorus]

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    Re: lyrics check... please

    Quote Originally Posted by b.a.d. View Post
    Hello! Please, check my goofy song lyrics for grammar accuracy :

    [Verse 1]
    Watching horror films until the midnight, all alone
    Looking as the flesh and skin are separate out from bones

    I love the scenes of violence, I'm mad about the blood
    I want it squirting out of bodies torn apart
    I've watched the martyrs slaughtered by the killer's blade
    They looked like stuffing on a plate

    [Chorus x2]
    I'm the bloodhound forever
    I'm the bloodhound to the bone

    [Verse 2]
    Glimmer of a blade and blood is splashing on the screen
    Cut off heads, the bleeding dead - nothing from what I've never seen

    I've watched a thousand times "A Nigtmare On Elm Street"
    I've watched my coevals??? scream of torture, cry and bleed
    Iíve seen the hungry corpses rising from the dead
    And once again the screen paints red

    [Chorus x2]
    [Solo]
    [Pre-Chorus]

    Goofy is not the way I would describe this song...sort of morbid. Good grammar though.

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    Re: lyrics check... please

    Thanks, great thanks! ))))

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    Re: lyrics check... please

    And may I say: "Until it's midnight"?
    "Coevals" - I meant people the same age as me. The word was found in a dicitionary. Is it something wrong with it?
    Thanks again.

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