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    Question Writing some considerations for a recruiter... Please, could you have a look at that?

    I wrote some considerations answering a recruiter and I opened my email with this few lines.

    Dear xxx

    Thank you for your email.

    I have looked at the job description and I can confirm it interests me.

    Here some further considerations from my experience against bullet points in the job description for you.

    Are those correct? Thank you for the help.

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    Re: Writing some considerations for a recruiter... Please, could you have a look at t

    The grammar is correct, except in the last sentence. May I suggest:

    Here are some further considerations from my experience against bullet points in the job description for you.

    Or better, because more simply and with active verbs:

    Here are some further aspects of my experience that match what the position/job requires:

    Or perhaps

    I would like to add several elements of my experience that match what the position/job requires:

    PS Perhaps "position" rather than "job": a more formal term, and better for a recruited career opportunity.
    Last edited by abaka; 04-Feb-2009 at 22:29. Reason: added PS

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