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    one sentence readability, please?

    Hello everyone,

    Yesterday, I posted my question as a guest, and now I think I need some more help with my writing. Could an English native or near-native speaker check the sentence below for readability, please?

    N.B. This may be published, so please respond if you are completely comfortable with the subject.

    Thank you in advance for all your help.


    *EDITED* ooops..forgotten to enclose the sentence in question. Here it is:

    However, both the economic and tourism business situation is expected to improve by 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered


    Best,

    Go4a
    Last edited by Go4a; 05-Feb-2009 at 18:10. Reason: mistake

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    Re: one sentence readability, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by Go4a View Post
    Hello everyone,

    Yesterday, I posted my question as a guest, and now I think I need some more help with my writing. Could an English native or near-native speaker check the sentence below for readability, please?

    N.B. This may be published, so please respond if you are completely comfortable with the subject.

    Thank you in advance for all your help.


    *EDITED* ooops..forgotten to enclose the sentence in question. Here it is:

    However, both the economic and tourism business situation is expected to improve by 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered


    Best,

    Go4a
    As a native speaker, I can say your sentence sounds ok.

    However, it would sound better as...........

    However, both the economic and tourism business situation is expected to have improved by 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered.

    buggles(not a teacher)


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    Re: one sentence readability, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by buggles View Post
    As a native speaker, I can say your sentence sounds ok.

    However, it would sound better as...........

    However, both the economic and tourism business situation is expected to have improved by 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered.

    buggles(not a teacher)
    Hi buggles,

    Thanks so much for your reply.

    However, I have a question. I thought I should use Perfect Infinitive to convey past meaning, for example, He seems to have been a great athlet = It seems that he ws/had been a great athelt. No?

    Here, I intend to say that *the situation* will improve. Can I really use Perfect Infinitive?

    Thanks in advance!

    Go4a

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    Re: one sentence readability, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by Go4a View Post
    Hi buggles,

    Thanks so much for your reply.

    However, I have a question. I thought I should use Perfect Infinitive to convey past meaning, for example, He seems to have been a great athlet = It seems that he ws/had been a great athelt. No?

    Here, I intend to say that *the situation* will improve. Can I really use Perfect Infinitive?

    Thanks in advance!

    Go4a
    'Have improved' is present perfect.

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    Re: one sentence readability, please?

    As I'm not an English teacher I can't really advise on the correct usage of particular tenses, but I can say that my suggestion is what a native speaker would most probably write.

    Having said that, another acceptable version is .......

    However, both the economic and tourism business situation is expected to improve before 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered.

    Although, having re-read your original, I now feel that using the word "both" pushes us to pluralise the "situation is" into "situations are".

    The sentence then becomes.......

    However, both the economic and tourism business situations areexpected to improve before 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered.

    or........

    However, both the economic and tourism business situations are expected to have improved by 2013 when the project is supposed to be delivered.

    Hope I've not confused you.


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    Re: one sentence readability, please?

    I'm curious as to what you mean by "project." If it is something to be literally delivered, or if you mean something to be completed or finished.

    Depending on which, one of the below would be a good choice of words:

    However, both the economic situation and the tourism business are expected to have improved by 2013 when the project is scheduled for completion.

    or

    However, both the economic situation and the tourism business are expected to have improved by 2013 when the project is scheduled for delivery.

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