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    This may not be a problem in ordinary days but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore may empty their pockets very soon.


    I want to explain the idea that it is not good to spend too much and too quickly, how can i change my sentence to make it looks grammatically correct without changing too much on the structure?

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    Default Re: Help me change this sentence

    This may not be a problem in [strike]ordinary days[/ normal times [strike] but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore so they may find their pockets wallets empty very soon fast

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    Default Re: Help me change this sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by gdzack View Post
    This may not be a problem in ordinary days but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore may empty their pockets very soon.


    I want to explain the idea that it is not good to spend too much and too quickly, how can i change my sentence to make it looks grammatically correct without changing too much on the structure?
    How about:

    During a recession, people find it hard to reduce their spending habits to match their reduced income, thus quickly emptying their pockets.

    Less change to the structure:

    Under ordinary circumstances, spending is not usually a problem, but when there is a recession, people find it difficult to change their spending habits, quickly emptying their pockets.

    Better:

    Under ordinary circumstances, spending is not usually a problem. When there is a recession, however, people find it difficult to fit their spending habits to the new facts. This causes their pockets to empty quickly.
    Last edited by Speedwell; 06-Feb-2009 at 23:00. Reason: Original sentence is correct, but looking at it again, I find it changes the structure too much.

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