The writing seems to be fairly coherent. The premise tho seems to be that Bill Gates is a success only at fooling people into believing that his software is superior when in reality it is not. The suggestion is that he has made his millions fraudulently. That is a little hard to swallow.
I suggest putting that in the present tense, thus: Recently, my computer decided that it hates me.Recently, my computer decided that it hated me.
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