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    Default Help revise my sentence, Please

    Can someone please help me revise my sentence.

    Meanwhile, Immigrants who were learning how to speak fluent in English set a disadvantage for students who only speaks Enlgish. Since the imimigrants were learning to speak fluent in English; the immigrants are able to go out and find a job as a result, fewer jobs for those who only speak English becuase the company's who hired the employee's are more interested with the person whos bilingual
    Last edited by Raffy; 05-Oct-2006 at 18:50.

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    Default Re: Help revise my sentence, Please

    Meanwhile, Immigrants- imigrants
    were learning how to speak fluent- the tense doesn't make much sense to much- how about 'who have learned to speak English fluently'
    set a disadvantage for students who only speaks Enlgish- have an advantage over students who only speak English
    in English; the immigrants- in English, they
    find a job- find work/find jobs
    fewer jobs for those- fewer jobs remain
    company's- companies
    who hired- that hire
    employee's- employees
    interested with- interested in
    the person whos bilingual- people who are bilingual

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    Default Re: Help revise my sentence, Please

    Thanks Tdol, much apperciated.

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