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Develped countries can have strong financial bases and often offer to assist poor countries. (Give two or three samples of wealthy countries assisting poorer ones) Although it can not sove the povery on the base, it help the poor countries to pass the tough period at least. (How? Give an example) At a short time make the country lead to fruition including the education ,industry, medical care. (Give details, WHAT education projects? What industries? What kind of medical care?) For the countries, they should establish the strongh systems which avoid the crruption spreading. (How can they do this?) be ensolved in political issues, and repaying ??? stress.
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