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    “Hello” I answered. ‘hello, Ali” caller replied. I recognized it was uncle Abbas.
    “Oh! Uncle Abbas” I yelled.
    “Yes, well Happy birthday to you Ali” uncle Abbas congratulated me.
    It was Seventeenth birthday. After my thanks uncle asked me about daily routine. I didn’t tell him something impressive or new. He felt letdown on my unusual routine, especially on my loafing around and doing nothing about our religion. For some time he kept silence and then taught me something new about our religion; what are Islamic obligation and its benefits from which I was unaware before. By the conversation ended I felt so guilty on my attitude. My mind was in state of confusion and I was unable to think. I finally promised myself, from now onwards I`ll try to overcome on all my lankness.

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    I'll fix one thing: Change lankness to laziness.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    I'll fix one thing: Change lankness to laziness.

    what about other ?

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    I'm too lanky.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    I'm too lanky.
    what do you mean by it?
    Last edited by Jamalmemon; 23-Feb-2009 at 20:39.

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    He meant "lazy"....

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