please correct my letter and please give a score to my letter
I am writing to complain about plans to enlarge MehranAirport the local one. My name is Jack Anderson. I leave just next to the airport.
in fact, we have several problems concerning this matter. Firstly, The noise will increase, and it is almost intolerable now. In addition, during the taking off or landing airplanes, our windows often vibrate. In addition to, the parking lot of the airport has not enough space so that many people parked their cars in front of the my neighbor s houses, and they often make so much traffic too. We already wrote a letter last year, but we have not received any responses yet. In spite of that I heard that the city manager devise a scheme for developing the airport.
As a matter of fact, we can not go with the manager to this matter, and if so our problems will extend. Above all, we realized that the mayor wants cut the trees around the airport and destroy the local park in order to develop the airport. I feel something should be done about that.
Please give this matter your immediate attention.
Re: please correct my letter and please give a score to my letter
Originally Posted by rezashena
Not bad. Just needed a little sprucing up!
In American English, it's considered bad manners to assume that the stranger you're writing to is a man. So "Dear Sir" should be replaced with a name, a title, or the name of the organization, agency, or company you're writing to
- Dear Mr. Paris:
- Dear Minister of Transportation:
- Dear Department of Aviation:
Lacking any of those, something like "Dear Person" or "To whom it may concern" is preferred.
Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 24-Feb-2009 at 22:13.