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    Such inexplicable situations happen every day all around the world, which remind the affected population of the unpredictable nature of life. In fact, it is impossible to control the progress of everything, especially when it is destiny.

    What happened on that Sunday morning on that English farm is an example of one of these unexpected events. Before that historic day, nobody would imagine that such a situation could occur. Mr. Jones, his wife and all his employees must leave their own farm because of their animals' behaviour towards them. According to them, one cow broke in the door of the store-shed with her horn and all the animals began to help themselves from the bins. In spite of Mr. Jones and his employees' intervention, they didn't pay off to take up again the control over those furious beasts. All men tried to calm the animals down by lashing out in all direction. In no time, roles were reversed. Every present animal in this farm flung themselves upon their tormentors. Jones and his men suddenly found themselves being butted and kicked from all sides. The situation was quite out of their control. They had never seen animals behave like that before! This sudden uprising of the creatures whom they were used to control frightened them almost out of their wits. Thus, they gave up trying to defend themselves and took to (took away) their heels. Their next action was not surprising because of their particular situation at that point. All five of them were in full flight down the cart-track that led to the main road, with the animals pursuing them.

    At that time, because of that terror feeling they felt in the deeper part of their respective body, they could not explain their animals’ reaction in that sunny summer day. However, on second thoughts, they remembered that this morning, they completely failed in their job by forgetting to feed their beasts because of some mysterious events they refused to comment on. We learned from their neighbouring that Mr. Jones had become much disheartened after losing money in a lawsuit, and had taken to drinking more than was good for him. So, thanks to that fact, we might suppose that those unknown events were related to Jones' drink habit.

    In conclusion, the only information we found is that nobody bothering to feed the animals... So it was hungry animals which attacked those poor people. According to me, this is a sufficient reason to provoke what I will call from now on “the Wild Rebellion”.

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    The animals rebelled because they were hungry?

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