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As for the biggest star of the 50s,
we(Who are you referring to as "we" here? If you happen to be of royal lineage and now occupy a ruling position as a reigning monarch, then "we" here is OK. Otherwise, if "we" here refers to you & someone else, then be clear about who the someone else is; if not use "I" -- which is what you really intend.) I have chosen Elvis Presley ., (Replace your period with a comma here.) who was Bornborn 8th January 1935, and died 16th August 1977, and was an American singer, actor, and musician. He isThough commonly known simply as "Elvis", andhe is also referred to as "The King of Rock 'n' Roll."
AaronAron (Elvis' middle name does not use the common spelling, i.e., "Aaron" it has only one 'a': "Aron.") Presley, the king of rock'n'roll"The King of Rock 'n' Roll", (You've just referred to this title in your previous sentence, so obviously you understand the need for capitilization. Observe it here then in your next sentence. The use of this title twice so closely placed, however, begs the question: Why not somehow combine these two sentences into one so as to escape the unnecessary restatement of the title, or delete its second use entirely?) a cultural icon, was probablyarguably the most important figure in the popular music industry of XXthe twentieth century. (Do you really mean "industry" here? Perhaps, -but from reading your entire piece, I think that you really intend "history" here. Then why not: "... was arguably the most important figure in the history of 20th century popular music.") Elvis Permanentlypermanently changed americanAmerican music, creating a new style, which uniquely integrated in itself miscellaneous seemingly incompatible impacts. (I think I understand what you are trying to say here, but your phrasing is very unclear. Why don't you try to rephrase this for the sake of clarity?) As time went byOver time, Elvis began a musical revolution whichthat engendered a global cultural transformation.
He sold about 1 billion albums worldwide. In The United Stated his 112 albums and singles
have reachedhave gone Gold, Platinium or Multiplatinium, Multi-Platinium, leaving other artists far away behind him.far outpacing other artists. Amongst his numerous awards, Elvis has 14 nomination for The Grammy awardsreceived 14 Grammy Award nominations (of which he won only 3three (Spell out all numbers from one to ten.) during his career) and also won Grammy for his Lifetime Achievementwas honored with a Grammy Lifetime Achievement Award at the age of 36. His talent, beauty, sex-appeal, charisma, andsense of humor, humbleness, and his deep sense of humanity affiliated him(The word "affiliated" normally has a business sense to it. E.g., "Elvis was affiliated with Capitol Records ... " Find a better word or phrase to substitute here. Perhaps you mean something like "won the hearts of") millions of fans all over the globe.
In 1972 Presley toured
overthe StatesUS and was planning to do a European Tour, but inon 16th August 1977 he died inat Graceland, inhis Memphis property. He was only 42. After his death, (A comma is necessary here.) his fame turned into ato legend. Even to this day, many people do not believe in their idol's death, sayingbelieving instead that Presley hasfabricated his death in order to start a new life far away from people. From time to time in the media, there appears some sensation s-- a sighting of about seeing theThe King. in a store all over the USA.
Today, 25 years after his death, Elvis still is one of the most seminal
personforces in the music and cultural industry. He's recognized by every generation. Elvis permanently sticked himselfhas made a permanent mark in theAmerican history, the world'sworld history, and in the music'spopular music history. Some of us still believe that Elvis is alive...(This final sentence weakens your closing, as it appears to relate to your previous mentioned conjecture surrounding Elvis' death. Also, an ellipsis does have its place. But here? It only seems to add to the weakness already mentioned.)
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