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    I am looking to find someone to give me some advise on what should be different or why, please help me ,review my cause and effect essay and if you have any suggestion they are all wellcome. thank you
    The causes and effects of global warming
    Global warming is the rapid increase in the average temperature of Earth’s atmosphere and oceans. The rapid increase in temperature is caused by a doubling of carbon dioxide in the Earth’s atmosphere. The problem is mainly caused by humans. Carbon dioxide stays in the atmosphere for years. The nonstop burning of fossil fuels and the clearing of the rain forest has caused a greenhouse effect in the Earth’s atmosphere.
    The greenhouse effect is the absorption of energy radiated from the Earth's surface by carbon dioxide and other gases in the atmosphere, causing the atmosphere to become warmer. The United States is one of the world’s largest producers of greenhouse gases. The main causes of global pollution are electricity generation, transportation, industry, agriculture, residential, and commercial. Some greenhouse gases occur naturally in the atmosphere, while others are caused only by humans. The three most common naturally occurring greenhouse gases are carbon dioxide, methane, and nitrous oxide. Carbon dioxide is produced when fossil fuel such as oil, natural gas, coal, and wood is burned. Methane is emitted by the production and transportation of such fossil fuels. A large percent of methane also comes from landfills. Also, Nitrous oxide is mostly emitted during agricultural and industrial activities. Man-made gasses such as hydro fluorocarbons, per fluorocarbons, and sulfur hexafluoride are also produced through industrial processes.
    The potential effects of global warming can cause some very dramatic and irreversible changes. Global warming affects the earth’s weather, oceans, and ecosystems. An increase in temperature will also lead to an increase in rainfall. Global warming also has a direct effect on the severity of weather. Stronger hurricanes, severe thunderstorms and random climate changes are the result of global warming. Increased evaporation will bring about heavier rains and erosion. The oceans are expanding due to the increase in temperature. Glaciers are melting at an unprecedented rate causing sea levels to rise. Melting glaciers decreases algae growth reducing the oceans ability to absorb carbon dioxide. Decreasing algae growth affects the oceans ecosystem. The tiny plankton that feed of algae would die causing larger species of fish that feed on plankton to die. Some species may be forced out of the habitat due to the changing conditions. Few land animals will be unaffected by these types of changes.
    It is easy to notice the effects on the ecosystem and animals, but humans will also undergo a large number of consequences. Economic, environmental, and health issues will harm some regions and help others. Agriculture in the mid-latitudes and subtropical regions would suffer due to prolonged drought and a shortened rainy season. The insurance industry will be directly affected by the increase in natural disasters. This will cause insurance premiums to rise and the risk that insurance may become unaffordable in some areas. Subways, highways, and railroads may require more maintenance as they become prone to increased temperature variation. Due to rising sea levels, coastal cities will have to incur the expense of building better coastal defenses. Higher sea levels will also threaten to contaminate groundwater, affecting drinking water. Increased evaporation will decrease the availability of reservoirs. Direct effects on human health would include fewer deaths from cold in the winter, but more heat related deaths during the summer months.
    By making a few small changes in our daily routine, the impact we have on the environment can be reduced. Recycling and properly inflating the car’s tires, the use of less energy is just a few ways we can reduce our effect on the environment and keep our world safe for generations to come.

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    Default Re: Can anyone grade my Cause and effect essay

    I'd think about the essay's structure:

    - You start your first two paragraphs with definitions.

    - Each is followed by a long list of consequences.

    - A final short paragraph names a few things individuals can do.

    Does that structure accomplish what you set out to do?

    Is this a homework assignment? Can you tell us what the assignment is? The goal of the essay isn't clear. Are you making the case that if I use proper tire pressure and recycle, I'll solve global warming?

    Tell us more about what you're trying to say.

    Thanks!

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    Default Re: Can anyone grade my Cause and effect essay

    the assigment is to write a cause and effect essay. The topic anythin of what we like to write about it.
    The assigment is to structure and cause and effect essay.

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    Default Re: Can anyone grade my Cause and effect essay

    You are preaching the party line. Are you aware of that?

    Why do thousands of scientists worldwide disagree with the thrust of your argument?

    Consider: what are all the sources of carbon dioxide production in the world?
    1. those that are man-made
    2. those that are produced by other animal life, particularly domesticated.
    3. that produced by vegetation
    4. that produced by natural phenomena eg action of the sun on the oceans and release of carbon dioxide

    THEN NOTE THE PROPORTION OF CARBON DIOXIDE ATTRIBUTABLE TO EACH!

    Why do studies of ice-core samples show, that in the warming/cooling cycles throughout the various ages, the increase in level of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere lags 400 years behind the start of the warming cycle? Isn't it the carbon dioxide build-up that is supposed to cause the warming?

    What political agendas have driven this one-sided, and very convenient, view?

    You can either rehash what you are led to believe, or do some research, and see that the 'inconvenient truth' is very convenient for some!
    Last edited by David L.; 21-Mar-2009 at 04:40.

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