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    expressions about love

    Dear Teachers,
    I am trying to write a comment of a love poem (Campion: There is a garden in her face); Could you please tell me which sentences are wrong and why? Thank you so much...

    1. The girl feels herself sexually prepared
    2. The girl is ready for love
    3. The girl is ready to love
    4. the girl is ready to love someone on a physical level
    5. the girl is ready for physical love
    6. men must wait for the woman to become ready for sexual love
    7. the girl is not yet sexually mature.
    8. the poet cannot have a physical relationship with the woman
    9. The poet cannot have a sexual intercourse with the woman
    10. the woman will not give herself until she is ready to do so.
    11. the woman will not give herself until she is ready to do it.
    12. the woman will not yield to anyone until she herself decides that it is not the right time/moment/ until she herself decides to do so.
    13. she will not allow anyone to have sex with her until she herself decides to give her favours
    14. Noone can have the woman s beauties until she herself declares that she is ready to experience physical love.
    15. None can enjoy her beauties ..
    16 the cherries are persononified they do not want to be bought by anyone until they themselves decide to sell themselves.

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    Re: expressions about love

    9. drop the 'a'
    12. drop the 'not'
    13 is weird
    16. it's 'personified', and it needs a comma or something after it
    16. don't use 'themselves' twice, maybe '. . . decide they are ready to be sold'

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    Re: expressions about love

    Thanks a lot!

    Bye Rip

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    Re: expressions about love

    [QUOTE=ripley]Dear Teachers,
    I am trying to write a comment of a love poem (Campion: There is a garden in her face); Could you please tell me which sentences are wrong and why? Thank you so much...

    1. The girl feels herself sexually prepared.

    I would definitely forget about the word "herself" in that particular sentence. The combination of "feels " and "herself" just doesn't sound right...if you know what I mean....?

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