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    check for grammer and commas

    OUR POLLUTED OCEANS
    Today, trash twice the size of Texas is floating in the Pacific Ocean. One of the major problems that is affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions. The more people learn about ocean pollution, the more they will help prevent it or at least decrease it. One of the major cause of ocean pollution today is the lack of recycling and the dumping of toxic wastes into our oceans by the people. It is effecting all the living things in the ocean, not to mention the harm it is causing us. But there are many ways we can help to decrease this problem. After all; we, the people on earth, are responsible for this huge problem.
    Thanks to the people living on this beautiful planet, toxic waste gets dumped into our oceans everyday around the world. They are very dangerously poisonous chemicals. Leaking of mines, landfills, dumps, and farms are some of the toxic wastes that gets into our oceans. Lead is one the most dangerous chemicals in our waters these days and it is caused by the dumping of garbage like plastics, human waste, and ground-up garbage. The water drains get clogged up with these kinds of stuff and ends up in our lakes and rivers. Eventually at the end, it goes straight to our oceans and pollutes it. According to the National Marine Debris Monitoring Program, “Plastic bags account for over ten percent of the debris washed up on the U.S. Coastline.” Plastic bags are not capable of being decomposed by natural biological processes. After awhile they break down into smaller, more toxic chemicals. Ninety percent of the ocean pollution is caused by the people on this planet because they do not properly dispose of their trash and some do not even recycle.
    Toxic waste harms most of our sea life, fish population, and even humans. For example, if a smaller fish eats one of the toxic chemicals and then a bigger fish eats that same small fish, it gets contaminated also. Then, worst comes to worst, it might end up on some persons favorite dinner plate at his or her favorite fancy restaurant. Now that may cause a lot of health issues such as, hearing problems, bacterial diseases, kidney damages, birth defects, and even damages to your nervous system. More harm can be done if the fish is contaminated with more dangerous chemicals like lead. Plastic bags are also harmful to our fish life. Hungry fishes, turtles, or other ocean animals might mistake it as food and die from eating or swallowing it. Sometimes the plastic rings from pop cans can get wrapped around the animals neck and cause it to suffocate. Because of ocean pollution, pretty soon most of our fishes and other wild life in our waters will decrease and that can be a problem for us and all the sea animals.
    We are all mostly responsible for all these causes and effects of ocean pollution. That is why we should all help by recycling garbage and plastic, so there wont be a lot of harmful materials and chemicals in our oceans. Other ways we can help is to use rechargeable batteries, dispose of batteries properly, use less water, and try to carpool. We should try to pick up every litter we see on the ground or by our beaches and report who ever we see littering. Using reusable bags and drinking water out of glass are also helpful ways we can decrease ocean pollution. Most of us ignored the famous saying, “Reduce, Reuse, and Recycle,” that is why ore oceans are so polluted these days.
    In conclusion, ocean pollution is very hazardous to our marine life and even to our health, but there are a lot of ways we can help, especially by recycling. Dumping trash and chemical wastes, like lead, into our waters, are some of the main cause of oceans pollution. According to Oceana Wavemakers, “The average American uses between three hundred to seven hundred plastic bags every year.” If half of these plastic bags end up in our ocean, imagine how many sea creatures it will destroy. In 2005, World Wildlife Fund reported that “nearly two hundred different species of sea life including whales, dolphins, seals, and turtles die due to plastic bags. They die after ingesting plastic bags which they mistake for food.” We can all prevent or at least help to decline ocean pollution by using reusable plastic bags, recycle, and dispose of our wastes properly. We the people on earth should stop polluting our oceans because we all love going to the beach and swimming in the ocean. So all in all, we should respect our ocean and ocean life.

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    OUR POLLUTED OCEANS
    Today, trash twice the size of Texas is floating in the Pacific Ocean. One of the major problems that (is) are affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions. The more people learn about ocean pollution, the more they will help prevent it or at least decrease it. One of the major (cause) causes of ocean pollution today (is) are the lack of recycling and the dumping of toxic (wastes) waste into our oceans by (the) people. It is (effecting) affecting all the living things in the ocean, not to mention the harm it is causing us. But there are many ways we can help to decrease this problem. After all, we (the people on earth,) are responsible for this huge problem.
    Thanks to the people living on this beautiful planet, toxic waste gets dumped into (our) oceans everyday around the world. They are highly (very dangerously) poisonous chemicals. Leaking of mines, landfills, dumps, and farms are some of the toxic (wastes) waste that gets into our oceans. Lead is one the most dangerous chemicals in our waters these days, and it is caused by the dumping of garbage like plastics, human waste, and ground-up garbage. The water drains get clogged up with these kinds of stuff and (ends) end up in our lakes and rivers. Eventually (at the end), it goes straight to our oceans and pollutes it. According to the National Marine Debris Monitoring Program, “Plastic bags account for over ten percent of the debris washed up on the U.S. Coastline.” Plastic bags (are not capable of being decomposed) do not decompose by natural biological processes. After a while they break down into smaller, more toxic chemicals. Ninety percent of the ocean pollution is caused by the people on this planet because they do not properly dispose of their trash and some do not even recycle.
    Toxic waste harms most of our sea life, fish population, and even humans. For example, if a smaller fish eats one of the toxic chemicals and then a bigger fish eats that same small fish, it gets contaminated also. Then, worst comes to worst, it might end up on (some) a person’s favorite dinner plate at his or her favorite fancy restaurant. (Now) That may cause (a lot of) many health issues such as hearing problems, bacterial diseases, kidney damages, birth defects, and even damages to (your) one’s nervous system. More harm can be done if the fish is contaminated with more dangerous chemicals like lead. Plastic bags are also harmful to our fish life. Hungry fishes, turtles, or other ocean animals might mistake it (as) for food and die from eating or swallowing it. Sometimes the plastic rings from pop cans can get wrapped around (the) an animal’s neck and cause it to suffocate. Because of ocean pollution, pretty soon most of our fishes and other wild life in our waters will decrease and that can be a problem for us and all the sea animals.
    We are all mostly responsible for all these causes and effects of ocean pollution. That is why we should all help by recycling garbage and plastic, so there (wont) will not be a lot of harmful materials and chemicals in our oceans. Other ways we can help is to use rechargeable batteries, dispose of batteries properly, use less water, and try to carpool. We should try to pick up every litter we see on the ground or by our beaches and report whoever we see littering. Using reusable bags and drinking water out of glass are also helpful ways by which we can decrease ocean pollution. Most of us ignored the famous saying, “Reduce, Reuse, and Recycle,” that is why (ore) our oceans are so polluted these days.

    In conclusion, ocean pollution is very hazardous to (our) marine life and even to our health, but there are (a lot of)many/various ways we can help, especially by recycling. Dumping trash and chemical (wastes)waste, like lead, into our waters, are some of the main causes of oceans pollution. According to Oceana Wavemakers, “The average American uses between three hundred to seven hundred plastic bags every year.” If half of these plastic bags end up in our oceans, imagine how many sea creatures it will destroy. In 2005, World Wildlife Fund reported that “nearly two hundred different species of sea life including whales, dolphins, seals, and turtles die due to plastic bags. They die after ingesting plastic bags which they mistake for food.” We can all prevent or at least help to decline ocean pollution by using reusable plastic bags, recycle, and dispose of our wastes properly. We (the people on earth) should stop polluting our oceans because we all love going to the beach and swimming in the ocean. So, all in all, we should respect our ocean and ocean life.


    I'd delete all the words in brackets. Hopefully, someone else will have a look at your essay. I have to admit that your written English is excellent!


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    Last edited by mad1982; 26-Mar-2009 at 14:12.

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    Re: check for grammer and commas

    thank you very much for your help

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    Re: check for grammer and commas

    mad1982

    I think you should proofread again. There are still many errors; and you have introduced one:

    One of the major problems that (is) are affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.

    edcowboys wrote:
    One of the major problems that is affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.

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    Re: check for grammer and commas

    Quote Originally Posted by David L. View Post
    mad1982

    I think you should proofread again. There are still many errors; and you have introduced one:

    One of the major problems that (is) are affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.

    edcowboys wrote:
    One of the major problems that is affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.
    Thank you, David L!
    You're absolutely right. It should be: 'One of ...... is affecting....'

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    Re: check for grammer and commas

    Hang on, though. I could be wrong.

    It is possible for 'that' to refer to 'major problems' instead of 'one'. It now seems to me, it could be either! - depending on the writer's perspective. You had one, I had the other!

    One of the major problems that is affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollution.

    One of the major problems that are affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.

    Perhaps easier to perceive as:
    One of the major problems that are presently affecting the ocean and the rest of the earth is ocean pollutions.
    Last edited by David L.; 26-Mar-2009 at 12:47.

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