It means, a change in the system carried an abstract thing, an idea, to a location called 'a critical situation'.1. This changing in the systems brought the notion to a critical situation. The teacher underlined this and asked me to rephrase it.
The King holds responsibilities over his country and people.2. To hold the responsibilities that must be held by the King over his country and people. What is wrong with "over"?
He also suffered from. . .3. He suffered also of painful shyness... and of lung cancer. Should it be a instead of of?
. . .had been. . . since4. King George VI was sick since his childhood. My teacher said that the tense doesn't go with "since". What should I use instead?
help is being taken care of Try, . . . for someone to help take care of. . .5. He keeps asking for help to be taken care of when he gets... What is wrong with this one?
Meaning is the problem. What does 'someone would question and doubt' mean, and what are they questioning and doubting, and who is the subject of 'to take care of his own self and family?6. To take care of his own self and family someone would question and doubt. I found a big question mark in here, is it the tense?
Yes. Also, take out 'of'.7. The prime ministers could of showing an obvious dominating power over the King. Should I change of showing to show?
Take out 'to be'.8. The disrespect shown toward the King was not allowed to be toward the Sacred Kings. How should I rephrase this one?
'became a negative one' is OK. It's the second part, 'when taking a look' that is awkward.9. The image of the king as "the good shepherd" whose function was to protect his people became a negative one when taking a look at what king George has involved Britain into.
a) What is 'it'? That is what 'must not be wasted'?10. He was a reluctant person in a time when it must not be wasted in hesitation, but in taking advantage of the position he was in. Syntax!
b) not be wasted. . ., but be_____ (past participle)
that would be more than helpful. . .11. ... that would be much more helpful in pointing out the citizens' reactions. The teacher asked me to use more than..? What should I do?