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    Question need your advice

    I'd like to write an essay about "How to throw a successful birthday party" (for a teenager) using a chronological order.

    Thesis statement:
    A successful birthday party requires a good preparation which include location, safe food and drinks, and party theme.

    In the body, I will talk about
    body 1: decoration and M.C.
    body 2: food and drinks for non-allergic and allergic people
    body 3: fun program and dress code

    Are the sub-topics in the body interesting? Your review and feedback please. Thank you.

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    Re: need your advice

    Quote Originally Posted by sio View Post
    I'd like to write an essay about "How to throw a successful birthday party" (for a teenager) using a chronological order.

    Thesis statement:
    A successful birthday party requires good preparation which includes location, safe food and drink, and party theme.

    In the body, I will talk about

    body 1: decoration and M.C.
    body 2: food and drinks for non-allergic and allergic people
    body 3: fun program and dress code

    Are the sub-topics in the body interesting?
    Well, it's an outline right now, so it's not really all that interesting, yet. Once you write it, I'm sure it will be.

    You mentioned 'location' in your thesis statement, yet it's not in your outline.

    When you say 'safe drinks', do you mean non-alcoholic? Most readers will assume that, so you might want to talk about that also.

    Chronologically, 'party theme' could be first as it might determine the venue, the location.

    All the best

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