Topic: you are planning to open a restaurant and the management of a mall offered you a shop in the mall, write letter Should be: ...in the mall. Write a letter... to him and ask for details of the shop
I am writing to get some information about the shop that you have offered me last weak. Weak means not strong. You mean week, seven days. My full name is Charles Jackson.That's unnecessary, as it's clearly in your signature, where it should be.
I have always wanted to have a restaurant where is served local foods. serving local foods. [although I am wondering what local foods are. Do you mean local specialties? or locally grown produce?] Therefore, I have passed a training course, professional one, in cooking field. a professional cooking course.
As I have whished,[delete this filler; also it's wished, not whished] I would like to serve the best local foods in the town. As a result,[Therefore,] the situation of the shop is [very or vitally --it needs some emphasis here] important for me.[delete this filler; it's ovvious to whom it is important] -
I would be grateful if you gave [would give]me some information about your shop and its situation in the mall. for examples [For example], how [what] size is the shop exactly? Where is it located
exactly[delete this filler; it's becoming overused] -in the mall? Is there any [other]restaurant in your mall? if there is another restaurant [If so,] what kind of food they have served[do they serve]? How much rent should [would] I pay each month? Electricity is [Is electricity ] included the rent? How about phone bills,[delete this. Phone bills are NEVER included in rent] dose [Does]it have a dependent phone [I'm not sure I understand this one. Do you mean an independent phone? A direct phone?] ?
Thank you for your cooperation to this matter. [in this regard / or / with this request]
yours faithfully, [Yours truly,]