Your opinion piece as posted is a first draft in need of revision:
When you do revise your piece, please pay careful attention to the sentence above that I have highlighted in red. Beyond your adherence to good writing conventions (e.g., proper spelling, capitalization, grammar, etc.), any assessment of your piece will be based on how well you support your opinion -- through either facts or reasonable cause and effect arguments. For the purpose of your piece, then, it doesn't matter which side of the issue you choose to argue. Rather, it is how you back up your opinion that really counts. You need to supply relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Originally Posted by rezashena
Before revising your piece for a second draft, it might help to make (1) a list of all your opinions about the issue, and then (2) a corresponding list that supplies either facts or a solid supporting cause and effect argument for each opinion you express. Only after you have compiled this outline should you begin revising your piece.