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    For Class, My partner Shawn and I, were given the pleasure to interview Pam Torres, who is the owner and operator of Prospect Hill Orchards, at the Farmer's Market.

    Shawn and I wanted to know if there was heavy competition between the Farmer's Market and Whole Foods. Well, according to Pam who is a 7th generation farmer, she has seen a steady flow of consumers who wish to buy her products, also being that Prospect Hills Orchards is a neighborhood market, the vendors are able to build relationships with the customers they see often. Whole Foods according to Pam "does a good job trying to look like a farmers market."

    Pam Torres travels from Milton, NY to Tribeca every saturday to give the neighborhood fresh fruit, syrup, jam and honey.

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    Looks pretty good.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Andie1199 View Post
    For Class, My partner Shawn and I, were given the pleasure
    Drop the second comma.

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    THANK YOU Svartnik!!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by konungursvia View Post
    Looks pretty good.
    Thank you konungursvia!!!

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