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    Please check this small paragraph

    He began his career with Lintas advertising and then moved to Grey WorldWide, climbing success’ ladders he reached to the position of vice president in 10 years. He brings to the table exception expertise. He is a specialist in achieving the results at par with clients’ expectations.

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    Re: Please check this small paragraph

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    He began his career with Lintas advertising and then moved to Grey WorldWide, climbing success’ ladders he reached to the position of vice president in 10 years. He brings to the table exception expertise. He is a specialist in achieving the results at par with clients’ expectations.
    Lintas Advertising; assuming that this is the full name of the business. Otherwise if the full name is just Lintas then put (advertising). This just indicates the type of business.

    'success' ladders' has a clumsy sound to it and the spelling is wrong; it is better put as 'climbing the ladders of success' which in this case sounds right and gives a better 'picture'. Better still would be ' climbing the ladders to success'.
    Then no 'to': he reached the position...
    'brings to the table exceptional expertise' see your dictionary for the definitions.
    There is no 'the' needed between 'achieving' and 'results' because 'results' is what he is achieving 'at par with....'.
    Either you achieve results, or, 'the results I achieved were...'

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    Re: Please check this small paragraph

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    Lintas Advertising; assuming that this is the full name of the business. Otherwise if the full name is just Lintas then put (advertising). This just indicates the type of business.

    'success' ladders' has a clumsy sound to it and the spelling is wrong; it is better put as 'climbing the ladders of success' which in this case sounds right and gives a better 'picture'. Better still would be ' climbing the ladders to success'.
    Then no 'to': he reached the position...
    'brings to the table exceptional expertise' see your dictionary for the definitions.
    There is no 'the' needed between 'achieving' and 'results' because 'results' is what he is achieving 'at par with....'.
    Either you achieve results, or, 'the results I achieved were...'
    Thanks for your detail analyses and pinpointing my silly mistakes. I want to know whih preposition is correct to use at par with..... or on par with....

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    Re: Please check this small paragraph

    >results at par with clients’ expectations.
    I would not use "at par with", it does not seem right to me. I would say
    results that meet or exceed clients' expectations.

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    Re: Please check this small paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Thanks for your detail analyses and pinpointing my silly mistakes. I want to know whih preposition is correct to use at par with..... or on par with....
    On a par with = equal to, on the same level.
    At par is normally used in the stock market.
    Therefore for all normal use use 'on'.

    No genuine mistakes are silly; what could be silly is not to learn from them.

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    Re: Please check this small paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by apex2000 View Post
    On a par with = equal to, on the same level.
    At par is normally used in the stock market.
    Therefore for all normal use use 'on'.

    No genuine mistakes are silly; what could be silly is not to learn from them.


    No genuine mistakes are silly; what could be silly is not to learn from them.....truly inspiring..thanks

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