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    Anonymous Guest

    pretty big story:( (part two)

    Could you check it then please?? ??

    Jane and Andy(were waiting) at the airport in Cape town to catch
    their plane back to London. They(were) on honeymoon in South
    Africa for four weeks and they(felt) very relaxed.
    They (had not been waiting) long when their flight (was announced) over the
    tannoy :"Flight to London(leaves) in one hour." As
    they(were making) their way to Gate 4, Jane and Andy(heard)
    another announcement:"Flight to New York(delays) due to a
    technical fault. Will passengers please go to Gate5 and wait there for
    further information"
    "Oh dear!" said Jane"I (hope)people ( will not get)
    confused. What (will happen) if someone (gets) on the wrong
    flight?"
    "Won`t be silly", said Andy."All boarding cards(are checking)before
    anyone(is allowed)to board the plane"
    They arrived at Gate4. Two hours later they still(did not board)
    their plane, and no explanation(were given). Then were both flights
    ready.
    "At last!"said Jane"We(have been waiting) at this airport for nearly five
    hours by the time our plane(will take)off!"
    There were only two flight attendants checking boarding cards. They
    worked very quickly and soon Jane and Andy(sit) comfortably in
    their seats.
    "Good evening!"said the pilot"Welcome to flight to New York"
    Jane and Andy both(leaped) to their feet and run to the front of
    the plane. Fortunately the pilot(did not start) the engines and
    they(led) from one flight to another.

    "Phew!"I(have) enough surprises for one day."said
    Andy"This(wasl not ) a very relaxing end to our holiday, has it. We
    need another holiday! Where(will) we (go)next year? "

    "Well" said Jane"as we (are going tohave) a baby by then, maybe we should
    just stay at home"
    "Pardon? What did you say?"

  2. #2
    gwendolinest Guest
    Well, here are the mistakes:

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    Flight to New York(delays) due to a
    technical fault.
    It should be delayed.

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    "Won`t be silly", said Andy."All boarding cards(are checking)before
    anyone(is allowed)to board the plane"
    All boarding cards are checked before …. (Also, I think “Don’t be silly” sounds better than “Won’t be silly”.)

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    Two hours later they still(did not board)
    their plane, and no explanation(were given).
    Since “explanation” is singular, it should be followed by was given.

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    "At last!"said Jane"We(have been waiting) at this airport for nearly five
    hours by the time our plane(will take)off!"
    This is rather tricky; I’d go for “We shall have waited at this airport for nearly five
    hours by the time our plane takesoff!”

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    They
    worked very quickly and soon Jane and Andy(sit) comfortably in
    their seats.
    were sitting.

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    Jane and Andy both(leaped) to their feet and run to the front of
    the plane. Fortunately the pilot(did not start) the engines and
    they(led) from one flight to another.
    Shouldn’t that be “ran to the front of the plane”? And … they were led from one flight to another.

    Quote Originally Posted by Anonymous
    "Phew!"I(have) enough surprises for one day."said
    Andy"This(wasl not ) a very relaxing end to our holiday, has it.
    I have had enough surprises …. This has not been a very relaxing end ….

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