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    • Join Date: May 2009
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    could someone take a look at my pre-writing

    guys could someone take a look at my pre-writing and make some suggestion.

    Pre-Write

    Bill Gates’ Impact on my Life

    1 Ideas:
    1-Do I like Bill Gates or Not?
    2-Bill Gates’ influence on my work day
    3-Microsoft Office’s impact on my work (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, etc)
    4-Email clients and calendars (Microsoft Outlook vs Thunderbird and others)
    5-Exchange Server vs other Mail Servers
    6-Windows or Macs
    7-Linux vs Windows
    8-Web development and internet (Apache vs IIS)
    9-Internet Explorer vs Firefox (browser wars)
    10-ASP or PHP(web dev)
    11-Standard applications in my everyday life
    12-Microsoft Office or Google Apps
    13-Bill Gates’ impact on my work life (better or for worst)
    14- Bill Gates and everyday IT (evolution)
    15- A Computer in every desk
    16- Maintenance of servers at work
    17- Automation of software and apps
    18- Is Microsoft a monopoly?
    19- Bill Gate’s Antitrust (US v. Microsoft)
    20- Bill Gates’ monopoly coming down in recent years

    2 Grouping
    Paragraph 1: 1, 2, 3, 11, 12, 13
    Paragraph 2: 4, 5
    Paragraph 3: 6, 7
    Paragraph 4: 8, 9, 10
    Paragraph 5: 14, 15, 16, 17
    Paragraph 6: 18, 19, 20

    3 Main Ideas for Paragraphs
    Paragraph 1: Bill Gates’ influence on my work day.
    Paragraph 2: How Microsoft communication application compare to others
    Paragraph 3: The Operating System war, how Windows stacks against MAC and Linux.
    Paragraph 4: Is Internet Explorer better than Firefox? How Microsoft’s web server compares to other server like Apache from Linux.
    Paragraph 5: How Bill Gates has changed Information Technology and IT Support in the past 10 years and the effects on my professional life.
    Paragraph 6: Microsoft is a monopoly and some of its downfalls.

    4 Thesis:
    Bill Gates has change the way I do computing in my everyday life.

    Thanks
    -JV


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    Re: could someone take a look at my pre-writing

    I would move your heading on "Do I like Bill Gates?" to the end to be a part of your ending summary.

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