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    yuliya8701 is offline Newbie
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    Default pls help me out to fix my mitivation letter...pick out the mistakes n flaws pls

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    Searching for language is offline Senior Member
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    Default Re: pls help me out to fix my mitivation letter...pick out the mistakes n flaws pls

    Without even starting to read this letter, I can tell you that the first and big mistake is the fact that you have no paragraphs. It makes it very difficult to read. The colour of the letters is also hard on the eyes.

    Please edit it into at least 3 or 4 paragraphs and then ask for help again.

    I am not a teacher.

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    yuliya8701 is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: pls help me out to fix my mitivation letter...pick out the mistakes n flaws pls

    yeah ur right... i didnt do the editing well thnks anyway

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    Default Re: pls help me out to fix my mitivation letter...pick out the mistakes n flaws pls

    Quote Originally Posted by yuliya8701 View Post
    yeah ur right... i didnt do the editing well thnks anyway
    This is called "using English" forum, not a beginner's course in texting.
    Yes, you are right, I didn't do the editing well. Thanks anyway.

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    Yes, you're right, I didn't do the editing. Well, thanks anyway.
    Last edited by Searching for language; 09-Jun-2009 at 19:53.

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