I have underlined the words and phrases that can be replaced by the words in red.Nowadays, children have a lot of homework to do. Some people, however, believe that less homework means less stress for children, so they will be able to learn other useful skills, too. What is your opinion?
Our education system is not so good regarding assignments of 'for' students. Mostly most schools give so many assignments to students for keeping to keep them busy in their studies. This is not a good idea because they canít do any have no time for other activities even if they are unable to learn other useful proficiencies.
Firstly, I believe that teachers should understand this thing and try to avoid giving so many assignments to their students. They should try to complete their task in class and if they think the course can not be completed without giving assignments then they should try to give less homework and should try to keep their stress level into a medium. Moreover mostly most teachers in present days at present try to make students studious, use a ; herethey do not realize
except studiesthey should learn other things in life like swimming, yoga, playing cricket, writing poems or computer skills etc. Many students can not do other activities and even if they are unable to learn other useful skills use a , here just because of lack of time,[U]their most of time spends [/Umost of their time is spent] indoing school assignments.
In addition, school assignments are very exhausting for students because they have are given short target times and students have to complete their task till the end of dead line by the deadline. I believe that teachers should co-operate with students and try to give less home works homework (singular) because if they got less homework they may get less stress.
Yet some people believe that students should be busy in the whole day because which is the cause and which is the effect here? they want to keep them busy in studies,use a ; here they think it is goof good for their future. For instance they suppose that due to more assignments they do not do any notorious activity and they donít go out more. Sometimes this thought is good but not every all the time. Students should have relieved relief (noun) from their assignments. They should keep their mind fresh by learning other useful proficiencies.
To sum up all the conclusion 'to sum up' or 'in conclusion' teachers should understand the mental level of students and try to give less stress by giving fewer assignments. So use a ', so that...' that they can
be able tolearn other useful skills or activities like writing poems, story writing, swimming, cricket etc.
You have correctly identified that there are 2 arguments and you have stated what your opinion is - watch out for the punctuation and linking words because sometimes the , or ; can change the ability to follow the ideas.