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    Default the good leader, please correct this essay.

    Creating the way for people to participate in realizing something hard is called the leadership. This latter is not allowed for everyone because it requires special characteristics that could be found in the individual by either nature or acquisition. These most important characteristics of a leadership are competence, consistency, and character.

    The first, competence evaluates the ability of leaders to head an organization or institution successfully. Competent leaders shine even in the darkest times, they are able to see and analyze the view of any situation and they select the appropriate decisions. As well, good leaders competent appear patently in solving problems that occur in tough and embracing times. Besides, leaders are competent and self-confidence to confess their mistakes that is the source of success. Thereafter, leaders are aware to put the interest of people or the organization they lead over their ambitions.

    The second, consistency makes leaders trustworthy. For example, Plans that are created need the leader to be consistent in order to put them into reality, because if anything missed it means that the plan is dead. As a result, leaders slip away trust of people. Consistent leaders control not only plans but also their assistants to work strictly. In addition, consistency helps leaders to be respectful and enforce their character on any stance.

    The third, character is crucial in leaders work. Character of leaders indicates if they could effectively achieve targets; as well as, it means to act as honorable, courageous, compassionate, and ethical. These traits give leaders many benefits such as dealing with as much as possible of people and gaining the reputation.

    In conclusion, leadership is not achieved easily. It requires a lot of patience and special characteristics. Therefore, the most important traits are competence, consistency, and character. Consequently, a good leadership can not be granted at universities but it goes with all doing.

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    Default Re: the good leader, please correct this essay.

    Quote Originally Posted by yassin View Post
    Creating the way for people to participate in realizing something hard is called the leadership. This latter is not allowed for It is not a quality possessed by everyone because it requires special characteristics that could be found in the individual by either nature or acquisition. These most important characteristics of a leadership leader (here you refer to a person, not the quality) are competence, consistency, and character.

    The first, competence evaluates the ability of leaders to head an organization or institution successfully. Competent leaders shine even in the darkest times, they are able to see and analyze the view of any situation and they select the appropriate decisions. As well, good leaders competent good competent leaders appear patently patently appear in solving problems that occur in tough and embracing times. Besides, leaders are competent and self-confidence self-confident - you need an adjective to confess their mistakes that is the source of success do you mean that the mistakes are a source of success? in this case say 'which are the source ...'. But if you mean to write a separate idea '..... to confess their mistakes; that is the source of success.. Thereafter, leaders are aware to put aware of putting the interest of people or the organization they lead over and you can say 'before' in this sentence for real clarity their ambitions.

    The second, consistency use a comma , here makes leaders trustworthy. For example, Plans no capital letter necessary that are created need the leader to be consistent in order to put them into reality, because if anything missed it means ...if anything is missed, it means ..that the plan is dead. As a result, leaders slip away trust lose the trust of people. Consistent leaders control not only plans but also their assistants to work strictly. In addition, consistency helps leaders to be respectful and enforce their character on any stance.

    The third, character like the paragraph before, a comma is needed here is crucial in leaders work the work of leaders. Character of leaders indicates if they could effectively achieve targets; as well as, it means In addition, it means ...to act as honorable, courageous, compassionate, and ethical people . These traits give leaders many benefits such as dealing with as much as possible of people as much as possible and gaining the a reputation. It would be useful to indicate if you mean a good reputation because the word 'reputation' can be used with a negative meaning.

    In conclusion, leadership is not achieved easily. It requires a lot of patience and special characteristics. Therefore, the most important traits are competence, consistency, and character. Consequently, a good leadership can not be granted at universities but it goes with all doing.... comes with experience.
    Yassin
    Good organisation of ideas for this title; with regard to this, it was easy to follow. I hope you understand the correction of punctuation. Syntax (the placement of words in sentences) is important and punctuation is related to this.
    Good luck for the TOEFL test - you are on the right track.

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