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    M Ali Guest

    Default Story of a Solider

    Please check the following story for grammar mistakes.


    When Salahuddin Ayubi started reconquering Jerusalem, there was a large army against him in which one solider was special. That soldier hated Salahuddin so much that he joined Christian Army only to fight against Muslims and Salahuddin. When Muslims reconquered Jerusalem he was also taken as a prisoner. He was shocked and afraid by the Salahuddin's victory. But to his surprise Muslims didn't kill, tortured, burnt anyone. Every man, woman and child was allowed to ransom themselves for a paltry price. Those who couldn't pay allowed to go free. He was also allowed to go free along others. He hears joyful shouts of ďAllahu Akbar" and saw Muslims praying Friday prayers in al-Aqsa Mosque after 90 years. He got the message "Allah is Great" and embarrassed Islam.

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    Default Re: Story of a Solider

    Quote Originally Posted by M Ali
    Please check the following story for grammar mistakes.


    When Salahuddin Ayubi started reconquering Jerusalem, there was a large army against him in which one solider was special. That soldier hated Salahuddin so much that he joined Christian Army only to fight against Muslims and Salahuddin. When Muslims reconquered Jerusalem he was also taken as a prisoner. He was shocked and afraid by the Salahuddin's victory. But to his surprise Muslims didn't kill, tortured, burnt anyone. Every man, woman and child was allowed to ransom themselves for a paltry price. Those who couldn't pay allowed to go free. He was also allowed to go free along others. He hears joyful shouts of ďAllahu Akbar" and saw Muslims praying Friday prayers in al-Aqsa Mosque after 90 years. He got the message "Allah is Great" and embarrassed Islam.
    ...he joined the Christian Army
    ...were allowed to go free
    ...along with others

    stick to your past tense..he heard joyful shouts....

    I am kind of missing on some logic in your second sentence. According to you the soldier was so special because of his hatred towards Muslims made him join The Christian Army. Wouldn't you think anyone fighting Muslims would be either a Christian or a Jew? Therefore, by your definition, all the soldiers should be special...
    Just wondering...

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    M56 Guest

    Default Re: Story of a Solider

    Quote Originally Posted by M Ali
    Please check the following story for grammar mistakes.


    When Salahuddin Ayubi started reconquering Jerusalem, there was a large army against him in which one solider was special. That soldier hated Salahuddin so much that he joined Christian Army only to fight against Muslims and Salahuddin. When Muslims reconquered Jerusalem he was also taken as a prisoner. He was shocked and afraid by the Salahuddin's victory. But to his surprise Muslims didn't kill, tortured, burnt anyone. Every man, woman and child was allowed to ransom themselves for a paltry price. Those who couldn't pay allowed to go free. He was also allowed to go free along others. He hears joyful shouts of ďAllahu Akbar" and saw Muslims praying Friday prayers in al-Aqsa Mosque after 90 years. He got the message "Allah is Great" and embarrassed Islam.
    Take a careful look at these suggestions: I hope they are OK.

    He was shocked and made afraid by the Salahuddin's victory.

    Or:

    He was afraid and shocked by the Salahuddin's victory.

    But to his surprise Muslims didn't kill, torture, or burn anyone.

    Those who couldn't pay were allowed to go free.

    The soldier was also allowed to go free along with the others.

    He heard joyful shouts of ďAllahu Akbar" and saw Muslims saying Friday prayers in al-Aqsa Mosque for the first time in 90 years. He got the message "Allah is Great" and embraced Islam.[/QUOTE]

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